Tuesday, September 15, 2020

Tuesday's Writer's Tip Revision - Looking at Story and Structure -Action

You've finished your novel or your story. Are you ready to send it off? Probably now. There's one more thing you need to check rather than send it off with things for an editor to pick apart.

Action is one of these things. You'll need to read the whole book. There are a number of things to read for when you do this read through and with practice you won't have to read and re-read until you want to throw the entire thing in the trashcan.

Action tells you if you have a story. Does page after page and chapter after chapter pull the reader forward. Become the reader fresh to the story and the characters. Is something going on that makes you want to turn the page? Are the characters' wishes, and dreams and how they go about obtaining them clear? Does the beginning lead to the payoff. Sometimes writers spend so much time on the beginning of their story that they neglect the end. This doesn't have to be big drama ending but it needs to flow from that beginning.

Have you given the reader enough information? having them not knowing something you as the writer knows about the character or the plot doesn't work for the reader. But, there's always a but. Don't give them sso much information they're bogged down in a swamp.

Makesure the major scenes are played out to the hilt> I know sometimes when I'm rough drafting, I leave blanks in the scenes that I have to go back and fill in. Make sure you've filled them in enough to let the reader know this is an important scene.

Are there scenes that merely repeat something that happened in a scene before. Think about cutting this out or making drastic changes like in viewpoint.

Once you find the action flows to make the story cohesive, you're ready to more on to more steps. The more revision you do, the less you'll leave for an editor to do and maybe make changes that don't fit your view of the story.


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Saturday, September 12, 2020

Wednesday A Marriage Takes Two #MFRWHooks #BWLAuthor #Romance #Medical

A Marriage Takes Two

Join the authors at #MFRWHooks here http://mfrwbookhooks.blogspot.com  for some great excerpts Mine is a medical romance about a modern marriage of convenience

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” This is medieval.” That’s Carrie’s response to the reading of her grandfather’s will. The money will allow her to provide for her ill mother and give her the chance to give up one of her full time jobs as a nurse. The money won’t be hers until she marries. This creates a dilemma. She has no time for dating and doesn’t know who would marry her until she thinks of her former best friend, Tony. But can she ask him? Two months later time is running out and she decides to take the plunge.

Three years ago, Tony and his wife divorced. Last year he obtained custody or their child. When Carrie asks him to marry her he decides since this won’t be a real marriage, he can accept. Years ago, he loved Carrie but never said anything to her. Now burned, he doesn’t believe in love. To help her uncomplicate her life he agrees.

Can Tony and Carrie get past the reason for the marriage and find love and make a home for his son?

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She slowed the car to a crawl. Waves of panic lashed against her momentary calm. The place in her head where she’d filed his address was empty. She braked. The paper with the directions fluttered from the dashboard. She bent and grabbed them.
One glance was enough to retrieve the forgotten data. She eased off the brake and cruised the street. Half the houses had missing numbers. What now?  Then at the foot of the dead end street, she saw the ones she’d memorized displayed in shiny brass on a massive gray house that looked like the setting for a Gothic novel.
A broad lawn fronted the house. The tailored grass stood in contrast to the tangles on either side.
“This is the place.” She gulped a breath.
After parking at the curb, she slowly released a held breath. She strode up the walk and onto the wide porch. Muffled shouts and noises came from inside the house. She rang the bell. What sounded like a slammed door nearly sent her back to the car. Who was staging a major temper tantrum?  She thought Tony lived alone.
She rang the bell again, this time holding for several peals. The door opened and she forgot why she’d come. She forgot to breathe. Her eyes widened and her heart pounded in a staccato rhythm until she thought her ribs would crack.
He was more than she remembered.
Are you sure you want to be here?
“Tony.” His name escaped on a sigh. She felt like a teenager come face to face with the latest movie hero. This was the man she planned to ask…She changed her mind. Time to retreat. The plan wouldn’t work, not with the things he made her feel and what he made her want.
“Carrie...Oh lord, it’s been ages. What are you doing here?  You look terrific.”
She did?  He must be blind. Even her coworkers had made comments about the deep smudges beneath her eyes. Most days, she felt as though she was suffering from terminal exhaustion.
“Come in.” He took her hand.
Exhaustion vanished. He’d always made her feet great, but this instant tonic-effect startled her. Coming to see him had grown corners she couldn’t see around.
“I can’t believe you’re here.” He drew her inside. “What brings you to town?”
She wanted to tell him, but the words caught in her throat. “Would you believe I was in the neighborhood?
Tony laughed. “No.”
She inhaled and the spicy scent of him invaded her space. “I came...” She couldn’t finish the sentence. He’d been her hero, her prince, her fantasy lover. In the flesh, he relegated those images to black and white.
“I bet you came to apply for the nursing position at the clinic.” He steered her down a hall that needed paint into a large living room. “Did you get lost on the way there?  Unfortunately, I’m not the one you need to see.”
She shook her head. “Another job is the last thing I need. I already have two.”
“Why?”
She shrugged. “Necessity.”
“I don’t understand.”
“It’s a long story.” She sighed. “I shouldn’t have come.”
“What’s wrong?  Sounds like you need a shoulder.”
The entire body, she thought. “You could say...It’s like this...I have a problem that needs a solution...It’s sort of...” Her throat closed. Maybe she should leave. Go home. Forget the plan. Find a new one. Except, he was her first, last and only choice.
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Sunday's Book - Whispers out of Yesteryear - Janet Lane Walters #BWLAuthor #MFRWAuthor #Romance #Elements of reincarnation





“Not the children.” Willow Carey is awakened by the remnants of a dream she hasn’t had for years. Today she is to return to Indian’s Sorrow, a house she inherited from her aunt. The inheritance has caused a rift with her twin sister. Her father and stepmother have died in an accident. Though she doesn’t want to go to Indian’s Sorrow, she must take charge of her young half-sister and brother.

Reid Talbot, a man she once loved lives near the house with his family. Now a widower, he lives with his sons. Learning to trust him again is difficult but he also has dreams.

Together, they must learn the meaning of the dreams before the whispers of yesteryear destroy their newfound happiness


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Thursday's Fifth Scene - Whispers our of Yesteryear @BWLAuthor #MFRWAuthor #Romance #Time travel


The persistent ring of the telephone pulled Reid Talbot from a disturbing dream. He felt as though he’d run for miles and never reached his goal. He rubbed his eyes and groped on the bedside stand for the phone. "Dr. Talbot here."
            The gravely voice of Ben Rodgers, Greenesville’s Chief of Police requested Reid’s presence at the scene of an accident. "Two victims. Car slammed into an embankment on County Road 7."
            For a moment, Reid wondered if he’d heard a hint of emotion in the usually stoic man’s voice. "Be right there."
            "Don’t rush. One accident’s enough."
            Reid pulled on a pair of jeans and a blue polo shirt. Who this time, he wondered. He hadn’t asked and Ben hadn’t said.
            After jotting a note for his live-in housekeeper, he lifted his medical bag from the dresser. Before heading to his car, he stopped to look in on his sons. Gary lay curled on his side. The covers had barely been disturbed. Rob’s bed looked like a major battle had been fought. The boys’ red hair, several shades lighter than his, shone bright against the white sheets.
            Twenty minutes later, he rounded a bend in the road and spotted the patrol car. A sick feeling settled in his gut. He knew the van and he knew the victims. In the four years since he’d settled in Greenesville, Warren and Nancy Carey had become his friends.
            He parked behind the patrol car. Ben strode over. "You need to check them."
            "I know." His stomach knotted. He looked at the shattered front end. There was no way either could have survived. Thoughts of his wife’s broken body arose. Her accident had taken place not far from here.
            He grabbed the medical bag. Ben’s round face mirrored the same sick feeling that roiled in Reid’s gut. "You all right?" he asked.
            "Good as I can be."
            Reid reached the van. He sucked in a breath and felt for pulses.
            "How long?" Ben asked.
            "Can’t say without an autopsy. Six hours or so. Is there a need?"
            Ben shrugged. "Won’t know ‘til the van’s been checked over. Was on my way to town for breakfast when I come on them. Not many folks travel this road at night."
            "What do you think happened?" Reid turned away. There wasn’t a thing he could do and that made him feel helpless.
            "Dear, I reckon." Ben rubbed his balding head. "Found a dead one ‘crost the road." He frowned. "Wonder what brought them home in the middle of the night. Thought they was staying in New York City a couple of weeks. Haven’t been gone more than one."
            "I thought so, too."
            "Asked me to check on Miss Mary and the kids. Talked to her yesterday morning. She didn’t mention they were coming back."
            Reid averted his eyes from the van. He couldn’t look; he couldn’t even grieve. Not in public "Maybe she called them. Children could be a handful, especially for a seventy year old."
            Ben chuckled. "She sure snookered you. She’s past eighty and she’s not one for admitting she can’t handle anything." He shook his head. "Them coming back don’t make sense."
            Reid nodded. Warren and Nancy had been excited about the contract for a series of informative and witty histories of Colonial days. They’d talked about plays, museums and people they wanted to see. Would knowing why they cut their trip short explain the accident?


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Meandering on Monday with Janet Lane Walters #BWLAuthor #MFRWAuthor #Reading #Writing #New Driver's License

Meander 1  -- Reading I have finished reading the 21 book Foreigner stories by Cherryh and I'm eagerly waiting for the next one. I know it will be months but the series is great. The way the action builds and the change in relationships also grows is great. Now it will be back to reading other authors and other books.

Meander 2 -- Thoughts -- The New Driver's License. Had my appointment to go for this and had everything together, I thought but this was not to be. I didn't have to wait long to be called and had my picture taken without my mask. Then I found most of my papers were in order but my marriage certificate issued in 1959 wasn't right. There was no seal. The people had a great time looking at how fancy the license was but it didn't have the proper seal. Now what. Either renew my passport of find the proper copy. The woman at motor vehicles, said "Just drive to the county and get the certificate. We're talking 400 miles in the middle of a pandemic. I don't think so. I found a site and filled out lines of text. Hopefully in three weeks I'll be officially married. I also might work on renewing the old passport. We will see. Then one must make an appointment to hit motor vehicles. At least they told me i could use the expired license for another year.

Meander 3 - Writing - Working on a re-write of now Chapter 6, filling in a lot of stuff I left out in the subsequent drafts. Hoping to finish this in November so we shall see.


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Saturday's Blurbs feature books by Fiona McGier #MFRWAuthor #werewolf #Maine Minnesota

When a Wolf Howls (Northwest Maine Academy Book 1)

When a Wolf Howls-- Saoirse is an unemployed scientist, applying to be a teacher at a small, private high school in rural Maine called The Northwest Maine Academy.. Diego is the principal...and a werewolf. Students are sent here so if a wolf is living inside of them, it will present itself in a safe environment. It doesn't take long for her to realize something's different about the sexy boss she's trying to keep her hands off of--but his wolf has decided she's their mate. Now what?  Book one in the Northwest Maine Academy series.

Worth the Wait--
The Northwest Maine Pack is settling down now that Diego, the new pack leader, is almost done healing after a challenge to his leadership. His wife, Saoirse, presents him with a welcome surprise. But John, the son of the late pack leader, has headed out to Boston, to live with Freddie, Saoirse’s bestie, whom he met at her wedding to Diego. This leaves a gap in pack security, so Diego asks if anyone from the family of Canadian hunters is willing to fill in for him. Grant volunteers, since he has been haunted by the memory of the black she-wolf he saw on the pack grounds. His wolf tells him she is their mate, but he doesn’t even know what she looks like as a human.  Nathan has been without any real love in his life, since his family disowned him years ago, for telling them of his secret duality. But when his wolf senses an unfamiliar she-wolf, and they mate, the next morning, the woman has no memory of anything they did the night before.

Everyone has been waiting a long time for what they want the most. But the path to true love is rarely an easy one. Especially when you are a werewolf.  Book two in the Northwest Maine Academy series.

For the Love of His Life--
When a famous action star needs to clean-up for a major role that even he doubts he can deliver, the director sends him up to a resort owned by his grandmother in the Boundary Waters Canoe Area of upper Minnesota, to learn to commune with nature.  His guide is Veronica, the director's cousin, a tall, athletic woman who has the relaxed, sensible nature of someone who knows herself well.  Raul's initial clumsy attempt to seduce her makes her laugh...so he calls her fat.  Is there any hope that their relationship will progress beyond its rocky start? Will the local woman he grows to love believe someone who "lies for a living"?  And can Raul overcome his partying nature to discover who he really is, and what he wants to have in his life?
Book one in the Minnesota Romances series.  Note: on the Amazon page, there is an old cover from a previously-published edition.  The new cover is on the Smashwords page for this book--https://www.smashwords.com/books/view/1012003
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Friday, September 11, 2020

Friday Fiona McGier is Visiting and Talking About Who She Was Before #MFRWAuthor #Reading early ##Contemporary romance

Day 1
1. What were you before you became an author? Did this influence your choices as a writer?
I have been a teacher since I was in second grade, and Mrs. Byers asked me to help her teach the other kids to read.  I'd been reading since before I started kindergarten, so it was easy for me.  I got an English degree because reading and writing were the only 2 homework assignments I looked forward to doing.  And when a professor said the teaching of writing was teaching students how to think, I was sold!  I raised 3 sons and a daughter to be educated thinkers.  One son has two little boys, and they have many more books than they have toys, so he must agree with his mama. And my daughter teaches Language Arts in a middle school. But I've always been fascinated by how people relate to each other.  Men to women, men to men, women to women--and adults to kids and kids to adults.  I've read everything that Desmond Morris, the cultural anthropologist has written about why as humans we do the things we do.  People-watching is also a favorite hobby of mine when in a large crowd--not lately, of course!  But I focus in my writing on how the characters relate to one another.  There is usually a flaw in either the heroine or the hero, and that person has to grow and change over the story arc, to deserve their HEA. 

 2. Are you genre specific or general? I don’t mean major genres but subdivisions or romance, mystery or paranormal.
I always write romance stories.  I've tried to write sci-fi, since that's my favorite genre to read.  But even when I don't try to, a romance always creeps into the story.  I only write contemporary romance because there will always be sex scenes in my books, because that's a large part of how people relate to each other when they're falling in love.  But the idea of having sex without birth control is a scary one indeed.  So my stories are always set in the present.  I swore I'd never write a vampire romance.  Then when I was having writer's block a few years ago, I put the story aside to see if it passed.  Then I had a dream in which a tall, white-haired pale man told me that I was having writer's block because I was giving the heroine the wrong hero.  It had to be him.  Then he smiled, showing vampire fangs.  I told him I don't write vampires--too overdone.  He shrugged and told me to research the Mayans, since they were a part of the story.  When I woke up the next morning, I looked up Mayan culture, only to find that every religious and public appearance of any type revolved around blood-letting.  Why so much blood everywhere?  Well, if your gods were vampires...the rest of the story flowed--as well as a sequel.  Now I've combined those two into a long saga called Prophecy of the Mayan Undead. .I thought I was done with paranormal romance.  Then I had a dream involving werewolves--and the Northwest Maine Academy series was born.  The first book is When a Wolf Howls.
3. What is your latest release?
Worth the Wait, the second in my Northwest Maine Academy series, about a private high school run by and for werewolves. It continues the two romances from the first book, and introduces two more romantic couples. I've created a different take on werewolves that I hope readers enjoy.

 4. What are you working on now?
I had another dream recently that introduced me to two characters who are in the process of telling me the story of their lives.  And I have a series of books about the various members of a large Hispanic family called, The Reyes Family Romances.  I've got a new book about 1/3 written for that series, and another one with only the first chapter done. And I have a series of 4 books set up in Grand Marais, MN, my family's favorite area to head to when we get a week off to go camping.  I love being up there so much that I was tearing up one year as we left to return home.  To stop myself from crying, I thought about how wonderful it would be to fall in love with a local person, and have a reason to move up there.  The first of my Minnesota Romances, For the Love of His Life, was the result. I just self-published the 4th book over the summer, and thought I was done with those characters.  But like old friends, they won't leave my head, and they're whispering to me that there's at least one more story I have to tell about them.
5. Do your reading choices influence your choice of a writing career?
Not directly, because I prefer to read sci-fi and fantasy, but I write contemporary romances, with the occasional paranormal romance thrown in.  I have written a couple of suspenseful romances, but they were influenced not by my reading, but by spy movies and TV shows.  I've always enjoyed things like the James Bond movies, Mission Impossible series, Bourne movies, and others, but I get irritated when the only females are either eye candy, or rewards for a job well-done.  I loved Melissa McCarthy's spy movie because all of the main roles were female, including the villain--and the men were the eye candy or the comedy relief.  So I wrote two female spy novels so I can imagine that I'm the one with the crazy-mad spy skills!
6. Where can we find you?
My website's first page is my blog, and there are excerpts and buy links on pages for all of my books.  www.fionamcgier.com
My Smashwords page is where you can read an interview with me, and access the first 20% of each of my self-published books.  https://www.smashwords.com/profile/view/fionamcgier
My Facebook page is linked to my blog.  https://www.facebook.com/fiona.mcgier/