Saturday, July 6, 2013

Saturday's Chapter from Born Into Love by Catherine La Claire


Chapter 1
 
Diego Castilla, former conquistador, once a lover of gold, was a nobleman born into eternal thirst by a sorcerer taken by madness. Tonight, on this sandy white beach on Long Island, he stepped into the ocean that soothed his spirit, yet threatened him. If he stayed too long, if he forgot to limit his exposure, fish would sense his flesh was different and be drawn to it.
 
Up to his shoulders in the cool salt water, he tracked a velvety shadow running on the pier. A woman raced to the end and dove into the black water, reckless and perhaps eager for death.
 
He was familiar with loss of life.
 
With ease he crossed the hundred yards of choppy crests to find her with her arm wrapped around a dog. She struggled to pull him into shore, the tide making her fight for every foot.
 
He slipped his hand under the beast and across her chest. In a fraction of the time the feat would have taken her, he cut through the breakers to the starlit shore.
 
As soon as her feet touched bottom, she slipped out of his grasp which meant he allowed her to free herself. With the waves circling her calves, she held her place next to him standing erect with her arms folded across her chest. The dog took off for the dunes. “We were fine.” Her voice held conviction and a smattering of intolerance. She backed away, but continued to hold him in her gaze. “Really, I had things under control.”
 
Ah. He was dealing with a modern woman. Then, just as surprising, she extended her hand. He shook it—a brief touch—yet he reveled in its warmth sensing something about her that startled him. She had the directness of her late aunt. He had spoken several times with Mrs. Louise Thomas regarding Pre-Colombian pieces he loaned to the Town Museum. But right now, he concentrated on her niece.
 
“I’m Mercedes Thomas. I grew up on these beaches.  I learned to swim here.”
 
Although he appreciated the background information, he sensed she had more to say and it would not be good. She pointed to a ghostly white sail on the horizon. “They either threw that poor little thing overboard or cared so little about it that a wave swept it away and they didn’t even notice.”
Nights making love on her bed leaped into his mind. With a graceful swipe of her hands, wisps of dark hair disappeared from her oval face. Eyes, whose color he could not read scanned his features waiting for his response.
 
“Forgive me. At first I thought you were trying to kill yourself. Then, when I saw the dog in your arms, you seemed to be in danger of foundering.” He sensed these comments might offend, but they were the truth. She surprised him.
 
Her laughter filled the space between them. Not since he and his brother joked and chewed moldy bread on an ocean-going caravel had he heard such a natural sound. Her flimsy shirt revealed an undergarment, but of such meager material that her bosom caught his   attention. Bosom. An old-fashioned word whose vowels lent themselves to a pleasurable vision. Her long legs proved equally delightful to his weary eyes.
 
Mercedes of the strong limbs and fondness for dogs tired of waiting for him to add to the conversation. She glanced over her shoulder as she stomped clear of the ocean and him. Her hips undulated like an island girl’s when draped in a sarong. Her voice burrowed into the enchanted moments he had been building. Now she spoke into the wind.
 
“I haven’t forgotten or forgiven you for touching my goods. And now you’re staring at my behind.”
 
“Come back. We can discuss it.” She marched away and he stood alone on an empty beach watching her retreating white shorts glisten with reflected light similar to the aura that emanated from the offending boat. She never even asked his name.
 
Letting the night air dry his body, he slowly walked to the stairs of his mansion sheltered by the dunes and closed the door. It took him a moment to realize he was smiling. This happiness felt so extraordinary that for a long time the joy had no place to settle.
 
The phone on the mahogany secretary flashed messages. “Luz? Come now.” His ama de llaves, chosen by him centuries ago, liked the twenty-first century best, but cyberspace was stealing his housekeeper’s brain.
 
“Yes, my Master?”
 
“Do not call me ‘Master’. How many times must I remind you?”
 
She shrugged.
 
Her eyebrow boasted a metal addition. “Not another piercing?”
 
“The latest, coolest thing.”
 
“I disagree. I regret giving you so much freedom.”
 
“To do your bidding I must fit the times.”
 
Long ago, out of rage at being turned, he laid waste to many villages, but her people recognized he had begun to loathe himself and his brutality and they altered their fate and his. He took her as a companion and she had been challenging him ever since. Sometimes he reasoned with her. “You deal with members of the museum. Do you think the spikes of tinted hair and clumps of metal will charm them?”
 
Silence. Her habit consisted of not answering when wrong.
 
“Tell me about the computer.”
 
She pursed her mouth. “Someone’s trying to hack in. I can handle it.”
 
His gaze traveled to the rambling cottage beyond the dunes bordering his home. “What do you know of the woman?”
 
“She eats organic fruits and draws stares from many hungry men when their wives are smelling melons. And our neighbor sometimes jogs along the shore at ungodly hours.”
 
“Really? And she shops in town?”
 
“She frequents the open market. She and I will be there tomorrow.”
 
He longed to see Mercedes again. “A change in schedule. You will handle the crates for the exhibit. They are the last shipment from Spain. I will do the shopping.”
 
“Master, that’s a bad idea. She’s just another mortal. Besides, I sense danger. I have never been wrong.”
 
“You have never been right.”
 
“Remember how they hounded us in 1759? I was right then, wasn’t I?”
 
“This woman is different. She is very much like her aunt who I admired. Besides, what’s the worst that could happen?  I might die?”
 
* * *
 
Mercedes stepped out of the blue-tiled shower. She hurried into a terrycloth bathrobe, toweled her freshly washed hair and dried it. She found a comfortable nightgown and slipped it over her head. Her stomach growled. Should she have snacks or real food? “Annie?” she yelled. “We got anything to eat?”
 
“Sure, but it’s in wrappers.”
 
Her sister’s voice carried up the polished birch staircase encouraged by the present lack of furniture. The basics were covered, but a lot of the chairs and tables, antiques all, had to be refurbished or refinished.
 
Great Aunt Louise the adventurer had refused to have them touched while she lived. Now that Mercedes and her sister were co-owners, they wanted to make the place sparkle like it did during the unrestrained eighties when their great uncle had made his millions.
 
Downstairs, while the micro hummed, Mercedes studied her sister. Being by the ocean had relaxed Annie, but had not eliminated the pallor. “What did the doctor say?”
 
“Not thrilled about my blood. He went off muttering about specialized procedures.”
 
“And the baby?”
 
“He’s fine. Just weeks to go.” Her gaze wandered across the newspaper stopping at a photograph.
 
“Hey. I’ve seen this guy.” She lifted the paper so Mercedes, standing to the side of the microwave, wouldn’t have to walk over.
 
“I just met him on the beach.” Mercedes gave details and watched a frown deepen around her sister’s mouth.
 
“He’s an international big shot and philanthropist.” Annie rattled the paper. “He’s into archaeology and old ruins. You have that in common. Want to know his name?”
 
“Don’t know how I can escape. You want to tell me.”
 
“Diego Castilla.”
 
“How’d he make his money?”
 
“Inherited it. Cattle ranches in South America, emeralds in Colombia, and a castle in Spain.” Annie sighed. “Why couldn’t I meet a guy with mega bucks and a social conscience?”
 
“He’s not so great. The big rescue involved his hands on the girls.”
 
“So? He saved you.” Annie sniffed. “That macaroni smells good. Well, Diego’s got to be better than Dave. Mention baby, and whoosh, he’s gone.”
 
“Probably off the coast of Madagascar.”
 
“Very funny.” Annie tapped the newspaper photograph with her finger. “Castilla’s attractive.”
 
“Doesn’t even look like that. His features are more angular and his hair, well, I think it’s really dark. Not like that picture. It hangs almost to his shoulders. At least it did tonight. And he’s strong, really strong but not manufactured.”
 
“I’ve been here all week. Nothing interesting happened. You get here and wham, life begins.” Annie gathered silverware and placed it on the table. “On a night like this, with you meeting a tall, dark stranger, I miss old Dave.”
 
“So he could empty your bank account again?”
 
Annie ate a few mouthfuls of macaroni. “I’m going upstairs. Eating’s tired me out.” She waddled from the room but stopped on the stair landing. “Sometimes I forget the bad things.” Annie blew her a kiss. “I know you’re trying to help. Don’t overdo it.”
 
“Sorry, Sis, but you need protecting.”
 
“Next you’ll be foisting some of your self-defense trinkets on me.”
 
“Let’s hope it doesn’t come to that.” Mercedes finished eating her half of the mac and cheese and headed onto the lower deck awash in mist. To her right a cluster of scrub oak hedged their cottage from the home of her neighbor. Further separating the houses lay dunes and a small nature preserve.
She turned to the ocean. The pounding of the waves had fallen to a murmur and the sea seemed to be waiting. But for what? She filled her lungs with the tangy air and felt the dampness slip over her. It had been a long time since she’d made love. She rubbed her hands over her shoulders and arms. The memory of her neighbor’s touch paid a return visit. “Diego Castilla.”
 
A gust of wind stole his name. Shocked that she’d said the words aloud, she backed away from the railing into the shadow of the eave. Something large flew over the water, something the scattering clouds had hidden a moment before. Intrigued, she wanted a better look.
 
Secure in the belief that no boats hugged the beach and that her neighbor couldn’t see, she stepped forward.
 
The large bird dove then seemed to disappear in the waves yet always reappeared. It wasn’t hunting. What was it doing?  Having fun?
 
 
* * *
 
 Driven by an adolescent feeling, Diego soared in front of Mercedes, showing off. Her pale nightgown caught the starlight. He wanted to take her into his arms. But not tonight. His mind slipped from him and he lost the thought. Blood. He wanted blood. 
 
During the summer his journey did not vary. On the breeze he veered inland across the North Shore of Long Island to a corner of Connecticut and his farm. The fields occupied a large track of green and fed a small herd of Guernseys. They, in turn, were enough to feed him, but too few to offend the neighboring landowners with offensive odors. Always he traveled unnoticed, a dark moving spot with the night for background and often, thick clouds for friends.
 
The animals wore tags and were rotated so he did not feed continuously on the same nourishing creatures. He assumed his human form quickly because the fluttering of wings alarmed them. “Flor, come here.” Like other creatures he could command, she was obedient.
 
He sank his fangs through her rough hide into the vein that gave him life. Stop! His human brain tried to surface. He did not want to kill her. He fought the frenzy. He broke away, lunging for another. His blood was sweet. He drank until sated. “I release you, Federico.”
 
Tonight no moon bore witness. He lay down. Damp grass cooled his skin, heated now by the immediacy of warm blood. Naked and wanting a woman, his senses grew keener. The soil was rich, the pasture pungent. He stretched out and remembered nights when the icy orb gazed down at him.
What was the difference between them? A question he’d asked before. A familiar answer. Nothing. He and the moon were both dead.
 
When he reached his mansion, it was dark. He waited in the foyer off the pool but this was not his usual custom. Luz should have met him to hold his robe as he refreshed what she called “his outfit.” If he transformed while clothed, the unseen molecules seemed to wait until he reverted to human form. He had no one to ask about this strange thing, since the only other vampire perished at his hands. He found his silk robe in the closet by himself and secured it with a sash. “Luz, where are you?” Her key turned the front door lock. “How is it I am home before my housekeeper?”
 
“Diego. Don’t be mad. These are wild times. More bizarre than the Boozing Thirties.”
 
“Roaring Twenties. Where have you been?”
 
“I went with surfers I met at the end of the boardwalk.”
 
“And you took?”
 
“Beer.”
 
“And?”
 
“I got sick.”
 
“Foolish creature. Look at me.”
 
“I am afraid, Master.”
 
“If you leave the house unattended for a long period of time, it will place our centuries-old contract in jeopardy.”
 
“What if you ask me to go on an errand?”
 
“As you well know that is quite a different situation.”
 
“Yes, Master.”
 
“Answer the calls on the machine. Check the faxes. I want a report in an hour.”
 
She scampered into his library wearing shoes that made her teeter like the champagne-loving European women who so long ago came to him  and never lived to tell.
 
Now that he had fed, his body was stronger, yet not as fortified as it could be. His powers had diminished for cows did not give sufficient nutriments. Their pleasant blood lacked the kick offered by human sustenance. With human blood, he became pure beast. However, these days, he was less noxious to himself. Would he be less odious to his lovely neighbor?
 
* * *
 
 
From the upper window he spied Mercedes sitting alone at the end of the pier, her hair swallowed by the night. Had she no sense? The beach was not without danger. Besides, it was damp. Wasn’t it true that women did not like to get their hair wet unless they were washing it?
 
He should leave her alone. Luz had sensed something he had not. But. . . he was weary of his life. Tired of sometimes reading minds, bending wills, and existing on the blood of others. When he transformed, often he was aware that he was both man and beast and the knowledge added to his pain.
 
At times, despite his attempt to shut down his supernormal abilities, he glimpsed a person’s soul. Not only was Mercedes named for mercy, but something in her eyes made him hope she would share it.
He would not sneak up on her or transport. That would be melodramatic. He fiddled with several of the tiny pier lanterns bolted to the pilings to alert her. The I-beams of the foundation had been sunk into bedrock, strong enough to resist the persistent force and drag of the Atlantic. Her arched back told him she sensed another presence, but his neighbor did not, would not turn.
 
“You’re after something. What do you want?” she asked as if questioning the wind.
 
The breeze nibbled her words, but he understood. He played righteous citizen. “This pier belongs to hard-working, tax-paying residents, correct?”
 
“Yes.”
 
“I like to look at the ocean. I won’t bother you.”
 
“I’m not so sure about that.”
 
“Why the harsh tone?”
 
She crossed her feet at the ankle. “Seriously, what do you want?”
 
The tail of her long shirt, he guessed it was muslin, touched her upper thighs. He approved of soft summer fabrics.
 
“You haven’t answered my question.”
 
Diego rallied much as he did when he fought his way out of battles. “My brother and I sailed when we were young. We crossed the Atlantic and swam in the Pacific. When I sit out here, I think of him. If I bother you, I can leave, but I am curious what pull the ocean has on you.”
 
She faced him and an onshore gust ran through her hair. “I don’t have a tale to tell.”
 
He took the opportunity to move closer. “My curiosity has the better of me. I still want to know what brings you into the night.” Had she been waiting for him?
 
“I jogged. Now I’m thinking about private matters.” She raised a hand to quell her flying locks. “I don’t really like the ocean. I’ve had nightmares about being over the Mariana Trench. Serves me right for watching so many documentaries.”
 
“That is a lot of water.” She didn’t laugh but her shoulders softened. A good sign.
 
“Your picture’s in the newspaper, Mr. Castilla.”
 
“Against my will.” He wanted to tell her that tonight and other nights he left the house to walk the shores or to swim because he was chased by loneliness. But confessing such a thing would be what Luz called a downer. His neighbor angled her body in his direction.
 
“Why aren’t you happy?” she asked.
 
Diego quelled his surprise. “Too much work. Never should have brought the fax. Technology is everywhere.”
 
“A curse. Don’t you have a secretary?”
 
“I have Luz. She lives with me, but is not entirely efficient.”
 
“Is she your significant other?”
 
Luckily he was familiar with this term. “No. We are related by blood.”
 
“It’s hard to fire family.”
 
He sat next to Mercedes, not touching, but close enough to have her scent waft over him, a sweet fragrance deeper than that of the purple orchids that had clung to a vine in the rain forest. What a conversational plus not to have to ask Mercedes’ astrological sign! Those days had not passed quickly enough. “What do you do?” An overused question, but an acceptable ice-breaker.
 
“I’m starting as an intern at the Pascuas Museum in New York. My great aunt supported their efforts. It’s a trial run.” Her hand fluttered to her neck. “I’m career hopping. I used to work for a big corporation in the city.”
 
“You have completed your Masters?”
 
“Not yet.”
 
“I know the Pascuas. I’m on the board.”
 
In a swift movement he admired, she stood. He kept his gaze on her delightful face. “You are leaving?” Too distracted by her appeal, he stated the obvious and felt a fool.
 
“No longer enough starlight. How could I spot a rogue wave on a night like this?”
 
“If you like, I will walk you to your door. There might be creeps around.” She laughed the sound soft and throaty. Encouraged, he continued. “You are free to use my pool. The deepest end is only sixteen feet.”
 
“Thank you. That depth sounds bearable. It’s volumes of water and the image of me floating on top that gives me the shakes.”
 
When they reached her door Diego extended pool privileges to her sister.
 
“How do you know Annie?”
 
“I saw another woman staying at the house. There’s a family resemblance.”
 
“She’s shorter and really pregnant.”
 
“You could address your fear of the deep by coming for a ride on my yacht.”
 
“No.”
 
He shrugged. “The offer stands. If you get up your nerve, let me know. The ocean can be merciless, but also fun.” In the cone of light issued from the lamp of her beachfront door, Diego studied her face. She showed no fear of him or rejection, merely registered a distraction brought on by thoughts of her sister. “I won’t take you over any abyssal canyons.”
 
She rested her hand on the doorknob. “Good. That would be very ungentlemanly.”
 
“Yes.” He walked away wishing she would follow. The moment Diego entered his house Luz’s voice poked holes in his fantasies.
 
“There’s a glitch. Remember that really old crate from the castle vault?”
 
“No.”
 
“Well, somebody got their wires crossed and sent it. Do you want the shipment to go to the exhibit? I can get rid of the crawlies, repack it, make it presentable for the museum.”
 
“If the contents are artifacts, they must be included in the exhibit. They must join the other items being returned to Peru. I assume we have the appropriate papers?”
 
“We took care of that formality centuries ago.”
 
“I want to shed any reminders of the days when I raged. After this exhibit closes and the pieces reach the Pascuas Segundo in Lima, I will no longer be a collector. I will have left behind that part of my past.”
 
“But Master, we keep replicas.”
 
“That is true, but they are like me. I am a replica of the human I once was, a different thing entirely.”
 
“Yes, Master. The other crates are on their way to the museum. I’ll tell the curator to expect a surprise addition. One more thing. Should I wait for your delivery from South America?”
 
She referred to his supply of canned cow’s blood. “No. I will handle it.”
 
“You haven’t slept today.”
 
“Go to bed. I can take care of myself.”
 
“So you say. I am gone.”
 
Diego watched her hop up the carpeted stairs to her bedroom probably stepping to a rock tune. It had been ages since he slept above ground. Restless from too much solitude, he returned to the deck that faced the ocean. Traveling with Mercedes on his yacht must soon become something real. Tomorrow at the market he would see her in sunlight. If he could learn the color of her eyes, the painful rays would mean nothing.

Friday, July 5, 2013

Just A Few Lines from Wolf Magic by Shirley Martin


This scene takes place after the heroine has been jailed for stealing.

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He reached her cell and–
Annwn?
Shock rendered him speechless, his throat dry. His heart pounded wildly.
Sitting on the floor, she held her shift in clawed hands, her arms and
legs covered with fur. Her face red with shame, she turned away from him. He
heard her sobs, saw her trembling.
This is Annwn?
He clenched his hands, fighting for control. Helpless to do anything, he
could only stare. He discarded his shock; his heart turned over with love
and pity for her.

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Friday's How She Does It featuring Catherine LaClaire


We all know there are six elements of fiction. Who, What, When, Where, Why and How. I believe the first five lead to the sixth which for me is plot. What's your take on this?  
 
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 1. How do you create your characters? Do you have a specific method?
I frequently have an initial scene in mind and I work to populate it. 
 

2. Do your characters come before the plot? Do you sketch out your plot or do you let the characters develop the route to the end?
      Occasionally I will sketch out events that must happen at the end, but mostly, I let the characters  
      have their way.  There are some things I know: the characters will do some emotional stretching, and 
      love and justice will prevail.      
 
3. Do you know how the story will end before you begin? In a general way or a specific one?

    I know the beginning and the end; they're bookends and arrive almost the same time.     Specifics  occur during the process of writing.
4. Do you choose settings you know or do you have books of settings and plans of houses sitting around?   Regarding settings:  I enjoy writing about small towns but am open to adventure and  getting an education about foreign locales also works for me.  I do not have a set library regarding homes or countries.
 
5. Where do you do your research? On line or from books?

I prefer books.  I like to mark them and make notes in the margins.  Documentaries and interviews are also helpful.
 
6. Are you a draft writer or do you revise as you go along and why?

I revise as I go along.  I'll write several pages and re-read them checking for content, flow and just plain making sure the characters still ring true to themselves.  It's the only way I know to keep continuity. 


Thursday, July 4, 2013

Thursday's Opening Scene from Shattered Dreams by Janet Lane Walters


Since this was released this week, I'm posting this. The final of the Affinities Series will go next week unless I'm on the road.


Shattered Dreams

Chapter 1

 

Manon Lockley parked in the driveway of the small yellow brick ranch house she’d converted into an office for her medical practice. She slid from the driver’s seat and paused to inhale the fragrance of the June roses.

At the moment she felt like the White Rabbit. She was very late for office hours. Mrs. Patton, director of nursing at Fern Lake General had been admitted to the hospital this morning with chest pain. As her primary physician, Manon had remained to monitor the older woman’s condition and to work with the cardiologist to stabilize the hospital’s most admired employee.

Manon glanced at her watch. Well past three. How long would she need to stay? Her stomach grumbled reminding her she hadn’t eating lunch. Exhaustion caused by the emergency made her shoulders slump under the weight of the event.

She opened the door leading to the reception area. Hopefully her nurse/secretary had been able to reschedule the patients for another day.

The rumble of a motorcycle sounded in the distance. Her muscles tightened. Her fists clenched. Her heart pounded in an erratic rhythm. The roar of a bike never failed to flood her with memories she didn’t want. Those memories had been shattered years ago and still filled her with anger and grief.

Do not go there.

After sucking in a series of cleansing breaths, she entered and paused at the reception desk. The cheerful yellow walls brightened her mood. She glanced into the waiting room and saw just two people seated on the brown leather chairs. Manon smiled. Two to four patients was better than the dozen plus who had been scheduled.

Emma hung up the phone. “Finally.”

Manon nodded. “It’s been quite a day. Things here.”

“Relatively quiet. Managed to reschedule all but five of today’s appointments. Schedule will be tight for the rest of the week. How’s Mrs. Patton?”

“Stable. Angina. No cause yet. Tests to run before we know her course of treatment."

Emma smiled. “That’s great. Will be hard to think of the hospital without her at the helm. I wouldn’t be in school for my nurse practitioner’s degree if she hadn’t pushed me to try.”

Manon half-sat on a corner of the desk. “Did you know she plans to retire?”

“I’ve heard the rumors. They say she waited until she found the right replacement. I heard she made a recommendation to the Board. Someone from the city.”

Manon frowned. “How do you think the supervisors will feel about that?”

“None are qualified. Ruth has a doctorate. None of the others in upper management does. What have you heard? Any names?”

Manon rose. “No rumors but I’m not on the Board. Hope they bring the person on staff early.”

“Is she that ill?” Emma asked.

“She’s almost seventy. Time for her to relax. She needs less stress.” Manon moved toward the hall. “I’d better start. What do we have?”

“You’ve time to settle in. There’s a protein bar and pomegranate juice on your desk. I imagine you skipped lunch.”

Manon laughed. “Does four cups of coffee count?”

“No calories.”

“Actually two sugars and milk.”

Unhealthy. Eat the snack.” Emma raised her fist in a mock gesture of threat.

Manon giggled. “Yes, Mother. Thanks.” She dashed down the hall to her office. Light from the windows revealed a neat oak desk with a computer on one segment of  the L-shaped piece of furniture. She locked her purse in the bottom drawer. After settling on the chair, she sipped juice and ate the bar. The snack should hold her for an hour or so. She used a wipe on her hands, donned a white lab coat and stood at the window to admire the red, pink and white roses in the side yard.

Emma tapped on the door. “Prelims done. One of the patients who refused to reschedule is, guess who?”

“Sands,” Manon said. “Why me?”

“You’re too nice to the jerk.” Emma fisted her hands on her hips. “Don’t you feel weird examining a man who has the hots for you?”

“Emma!” Manon shook her head. “There’s nothing personal on my part.”

“You need to dismiss him as a patient. He’s a stalker and if this visit is like the others, we can’t bill his insurance.”

Manon groaned. Tom Sands was a persistent pest from her past who wanted a role in her present and future. They’d gone to the same private high school. When she’d entered med school, he’d been studying law at the same university.

Manon released a long sigh. Why today? Twelve years ago on this date in June, she had experienced the worst day of her life. Had he purposely chosen this day for a visit?

She stepped into the hall. “What’s his problem? I wonder why a lawyer doesn’t understand how close to trouble he ventures.”

“He knows you’re a softie.” Emma scowled. “Do you think he’s trying to push you into committing fraud so he has a hold over you? Doesn’t he understand you can’t bill his insurance company for every silly complaint?”

Though Manon hadn’t wanted to believe her friend. She knew Emma was right. Tom’s frequent visits for non-existent illnesses needed to end. “I don’t think he cares. What’s his current complaint?”

“Fever. Was ninety-eight point nine. Since that’s above the average normal temp, I guess he’s right.”

“Barely.”

“Want me to come in with you?”

Since she seldom needed a nurse for a routine exam, Manon shook her head. “If I’m not out in ten minutes think of an excuse to barge in. Anything else I need to know?”

“Tried to reach patient number five. The new one. The message went straight to his voice mail.” She turned. “He’s a hospital hire.”

Manon frowned. “Why come here? I could have seen him tomorrow at Employee Health.”

“Never thought to ask. Want me to try again?”

Manon nodded. “Refer him to the hospital.” She’d taken the position there when she’d arrived in town. The extra money had helped until her practice had built. Did any of the new doctors in town wanted to take her place? She would ask.

“Then we’re set.”

Manon moved into the hall. “If this hire arrives before I’m through I’ll do a physical. Where’s Sands?”

“Room one.”

Manon crossed the hall and pulled the chart from the rack on the wall beside the door. She glanced at the number of unwarranted visits. Her determination to see him gone grew.

Carrying this thought, she entered the examining room and halted. Tom had failed to don the patient goes. Clad only in bright blue boxers and blue socks he sat on the edge of the examining table. His physique lacked the ability to attract her. Flabby chest, narrow shoulders, pale skin covered with dark hair. Her jaw clenched.

Tom grinned. “I’ve been waiting.”

I haven’t. She remained in the doorway. “What do you want?”

“I have a fever.”

She released an exasperated sigh. “Ninety-eight point nine isn’t indicative of an illness. Why are you wasting my time?”

“If you would take my calls and accept my invitations to dinner, I wouldn’t have to play sick.”

Her hands coiled into fists. “You’ve put me in a difficult situation. If I bill your insurance company, I’m guilty of fraud. Was that your purpose? Want me to lose my license to practice medicine?”

“If course not.” He set his feet on the footstool. “I’m frustrated. Come to dinner with me.” He lunged for her hand and nearly fell.

Manon reached behind for the doorknob. “The answer is no. I don’t want to go anywhere with you. In high school, after that first dreadful date, I turned down your invitations. I said no when I was in grad school. That remains my answer.”

“How long will you cling to the memory of a dead man? He deserted you.” Tom reached for his trousers.

Manon’s bond tensed. Did he remember the date? Had he come to the office to say those words? “That is my affair.”

He pulled on his trousers and donned his shirt. “There’s no reason for you to be so cold. A bit of a social life might thaw your icy core.”

Manon jerked the door open. The aloofness had developed during the three years of touring Europe with her father. Iciness had kept her sane. Thoughts of grief and anger oozed beneath the barrier she’d built over her emotions. Though she had tried to forget her first love, he’d claimed part of her heart and the emptiness remained.

“Just go away,” she said.

“Come on. Give me a chance. Your father favored me.”

A peal of laughter she couldn’t contain escaped. Did Tom think mentioning her father would influence her decision? “You have no idea what my father thought about you. He believed you wouldn’t interfere with his plans for me.”

“I told him. I would be proud to manage your career.”

Her lip curled. “One I never wanted.”

“What was wrong with pursuing a career as a concert pianist? Think of the fame and fortune.”

She turned away. “And dreary hotels, fawning people and having your strings pulled by an egotist. Becoming a doctor had always been my dream. Get dressed and leave. Find another doctor.”

She closed the door with a firm click. When she reached her office, she slumped on the chair. She needed to calm her anger before seeing her next patient. Tom’s persistence began to frighten her. She wasn’t sure what she could do.

After she regained her calm center, she left the office. Relief washed through her. The door to the first examining room stood open. Emma stood with another patient.

Manon entered the second treatment room where she checked a hypertensive woman’s blood pressure and handed her several diets. She returned to the first room to study a diabetic’s blood sugar results. She congratulated him on how well he controlled his condition without medication. On her return to the second room, she listened to the lungs of a recovering pneumonia patient and cleared the woman to return to work.

She dropped the charts in her office and walked to the reception area. “Has the last patient arrived?”

“He’s changing. I’ll do the prelim.” Emma grinned. “He’s hot. Big guy with well defined muscles. Blue eyes surrounded by dark lashes. Lord, I’d love to have them. Oh, a killer smile.”

Manon laughed. “Have plans for him?”

Emma turned away. “I can only look and dream. He says he’s taken.”

“Maybe the next one will be yours.”

Emma hurried down the hall. Manon studied the next day’s schedule and discovered she’d be involved in a marathon of patient visits.

She rested her elbow on the desk. She had to do something about Tom. His weekly visits for vague complaints had to stop. Several times she’d referred him to specialists. The lack of calls from these doctors meant he hadn’t made any of the calls. Why didn’t he hear her message? She had no intention of dating him again. His awkward attempt at seduction when they’d been in high school had made her vow never again. She hadn’t changed her mind.

A painful memory surfaced. Her hands fisted.

Not going there either. Not today. Not ever.

Emma paused at the desk. “New patient is set.” She dropped a thick packet on the desk. “Copy of his medical record.”

Manon stared at the manila folder. With a health history with that many pages, she wondered why the hospital had hired him. She rose.

“Anything I should know?” Emma asked.

“There is. Once I document Mr. Sands’ last visit, make a copy of his records for him. If he calls for an appointment remind him he’s no longer my patient. I’m not willing to commit insurance fraud or have him continue to take time when I could see someone who needs me.”

“About time,” Emma said. “What if he persists?”

“I’ll ask for a restraining order and mention the office visits and my fears of being involved in fraud.”

Emma laughed. “Good for you. Bet that stops him.” She leaned against the wall. “Do you mind if I head out? If I rush, I can have dinner before class.”

“Go ahead. “Which class?”

“Statistics. Love that class.”

“You’re crazy.”

Emma slung her bag over her shoulder. “See you.”

Manon watched her friend hurry away. At the door, Emma waved and grinned.

Why the sly smile? Manon walked to the examining room and pulled a folder from the holder. She glanced inside. No name. Emma had been in a hurry.

As she opened the door, the scent of an aftershave sent her hurtling toward the past. For the second time that afternoon, memories of the boy she’d loved surfaced. She drew a deep breath.

Get a grip.

Without a glance at the waiting patient, she strode to the counter. The aroma strengthened. Hadn’t been her imagination. She turned her head and stared at the man wearing the green cotton examining gown. She gripped the edge of the counter. Blood rushed from her head.

“You’re dead.” The words slashed the silence. This couldn’t be happening.

“Hardly.”

The voice sounded like the one from her dreams. She opened her mouth to ask where he’d been and what he’d been doing for the past twelve years. She sucked in a shallow breath. Asking that question would only stir the emotions she had frozen.

“Don’t bail on me. Sit down.”

Her fingers had no feeling. Waves of darkness dimmed her vision. The edge of the counter disappeared. Her knees buckled. Blackness engulfed her.

 

Wednesday, July 3, 2013

Wednesday's Writer's Tip - In the Beginning


Still gleaning tips from Techniques of the Selling Writer by Dwight V Swain. Now that you've identified the focus character of the story, the goals, the coming problems, how do you begin? There are as many ways to begin as there are stories. I know I write the first scene many times trying out a number of ways. What I have found is the story has to begin when there is a possibility of change.

The story can begin moments before the change takes place, during the change or moments after the change has occurred.

The first kind of beginning usually involves a relaxed opening where the character or characters, the setting and any other pictures you want to create are shown to the reader. One thing with this kind of opening is to develop the tension, showing in subtle ways that something is about to happen. Establishing the mood or tone is vital to this opening to lure the reader into the story.

When the opening takes place in the middle of the action the goals and motivations must be made clear. This kind of opening can have problems. If you start with a totally chaotic scene with lots of action the problem becomes how to maintain the tension in the scenes to follow.

The third way to open is after the change has taken place and here you need to show the focus character's decision to take action.

In all openings the focus character and any other characters needed to carry the scene need to be there. Too many characters up front can confuse the reader. The setting needs to be made clear. The focus character's goals and reasons for these goals need to be established and the problems to come must be at least hinted.

I've probably used all of these openings in various stories but I find the first one is usually the way I begin. Often this part of the story is drastically cut or left out immediately.

Tuesday, July 2, 2013

Tuesday's Inspiration ala Margaret Chittenden


While reading the essay by Margaret Chittendon, I remember reading some of her stories years ago and something she said at the end of the story made me think about why sometimes a story wasn't working right.

"For the reader to have an emotional reaction, the writer must have one first." What a great piece of advice. Every writer wants the readers to love or hate their characters. I think of the many times when working on a story that I find this is flat. Part of the reason is I've created a character I sort of liked, but I didn't love this character. I usually manage to create villains that I can hate and some that I can resonate with.

The thing about this quote that inspired me was that I needed to find things about the characters that not only could I love or hate but emotions that made me want to show this character to the world. Right now I'm working with a hero who plans things. He makes lists. Now I can feel a love for him since that's what I do in my life. I can love this man and hopefully this will also carry over to the reader and to the heroine of the story.

So when the story seems a it flat or one of the characters seem blah, sit down and really get acquainted with the character and let yourself fall in love with hero, heroine and villain. Then tell the story.

Monday, July 1, 2013

Meandering On Monday with Janet Lane Walters - Shattered Dreams live

Late yesterday Shattered Dreams went live. http://www.amazon.com/Shattered-Dreams-Moonchild-ebook/dp/B00DPZT6K2/ref=sr_1_1?s=digital-text&ie=UTF8&qid=1372680970&sr=1-1&keywords=janet+lane+Walters plus it's at Smashwords and All Romance. What a thrill. The edits were so easy to make and the cover is wonderful. This story is the first of the Moon Child series, based on my knowledge of Astrology. This time, the heroine and hero both have birthdays under the sign of Cancer. The second will have a Cancer heroine and an Aries hero. Have just blocked in that story but first I need to finish the last of the Seduction series, A Spicy Seduction. That story is moving ahead rapidly. Makes me feel great when that happens.

As to the second meander my reading time. Not as much this week as sometimes but life does manage to intervene. Did read Bob Mayar's Black Ops The Gate. I do like action adventure and once I got into the story found it very interesting and kept me reading until I reached the end. Met the author at a conference and he's as dynamic as his stories.