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Thursday, March 30, 2023

Thursday's Opening Scene from The Secret of the Jewels #BWLAuthor #MFRWAuthor #fantasy #action #adventure

Seven Jewels and seven threads.  Find them, twine them, bind them into a braid to discover how to unlock the secret of the Jewels. What was pale becomes dark and dark changes to light.  Sometimes destruction is the way to end a cycle of tyranny.   Blazing sun and icy moons unite in the Yellow Jewel.  You must go over land,  across the sea and back again.  Seek the thread and learn this lesson.  What makes a home does not have to be a place.  Fears may lurk and fears are faced when one learns to trust.

~*~

Disa turned and waved farewell to the Holders and their Chosen who remained at the mages’ stronghold.  All but she and Brader stayed to tend to the living and the dead.  Just days ago, the elderly healer had appeared and had given prophecies to all.  The moment Disa had heard those words she knew she and Brader had to leave.  Their role in the destruction of the mages lair had ended.  The overland journey to Quato where they would board a ship to Thanis would take a seven day.   

She prodded her horned horse and caught up with her companion.  “Must we race like prisoners released from a dungeon?”

He slowed his steed.  “Why not?  I wish to reach my home as soon as I can.”

Home, she thought.  Hers had been a peddler’s wagon and then the tavern in Pala.  She didn’t understand his being drawn to a place.  “Thy home won’t run.”

He laughed.  “Thee are right, but some inner yearning pushes me to hurry to High Sanctuary.  What if the mages have established a refuge there?”

She made a face.  “Didn’t Andalor mention a ship filled with Queen’s Guards and mages that arrived in Quato around the time when thee did?”

“One or more might have remained.  I need to find out.”

She supposed he was right but that wasn’t his real reason for the rush to return to his home.  He wanted to visit his mother’s grave to bid her farewell.  Did he really believe her spirit lingered on this plane waiting to hear of the success or failure of Liara’s quest?

At dusk they arrived in Desert’s Edge where they purchased enough supplies for the journey.  She nearly suggested they stop at the Healers’ House for medicinals, but could think of none they would need before they reached the market in Quato.

Eight days of traveling from dawn to dusk brought them to the seaport town.  On the outskirts they passed the villa where she had received her Jewel.  “Remember our time here?”  she asked.

“Clearly.  What a pompous fool I was.  Attacking Valmir when he wasn’t the enemy.  Angering Liara and thee.”

She reached for his hand.  “Thee feared someone would harm her and keep her from the quest.”  She sighed.  “I wonder how the others fare.”

“If there were problems couldn’t they reach us on the inner path?”  Brader asked.

“I don’t know.  I’ve listened every night and the voices have grown fainter.  Should we stay here or go directly to the docks?”

He prodded his horse.  “This is too far from town.  We’ll find an inn.  Word of ships leaving for Thanis will be heard at one, but we can’t leave for a day or two.”

She nodded.  “We have to sell the horses.”

“And arrange for passage.  We’re too late for today’s animal market.”

Once inside the town Disa led him to the inn where she and Andalor had stayed.  They were in luck and one of the suites on the third story was available.  After leaving their packs in the suite’s central room, they ordered a meal to be brought as soon as they finished in the baths.

A short time after returning to the suite, Disa opened the door for a serving woman bearing a large tray of food.  Disa inhaled the aroma of brewed chokla and grinned.  She slipped the woman a coin.  Brader entered from his sleeping chamber.  He fastened his amber colored hair at his nape with a thong.

“What of our plans for tomorrow?”  Disa filled a mug with her chosen drink.

“Sell the horses.  Find a ship.  Purchase some extra food for the journey.  Ship’s food is plain and sometimes not tasty.”

“Will we have to wait long?”  Though they’d taken coins from the mages’ treasury, if they were forced to stay too long their coins would vanish.

He shrugged.  “Who knows?  I’ll slip down to the common room.  Someone there will know about sailings.”

Disa lifted a banta leg.  “No tragon.”

He laughed.  “Guess Liara told thee how little tolerance I have for spirits.  I’ll stick to ale.”

Though Disa had planned to stay awake until Brader returned, the soft mattress lulled her to sleep. 

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Tuesday, March 28, 2023

Tuesday's Writer's Tip - The Action Plot #BWLAuthor #MFRWAuthor #writing #plot #action

The Action Plot in the beginning scenes often shows the character who will leave and explore the land to fail as many as three times before he's pushed out the door. There should be a reason for this character ti try these semi-leavings, The reason usually isn't understood until the end. Make sure not to make these tasks unrelated.   Remember cause and effect when showing these scenes 

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Sunday, March 26, 2023

Sunday's Book The Secret of the Jewels #BWLAuthor #MFRWAuthor #fantasy, #action #adventure #Jewels

 






Seven Jewels – Seven Holders and their bondmates. The words of an elderly Healer send each pair on a quest to learn the secret of the Jewels. Are these gems just tools or do they hold hidden danger for the Holders? The seven leave on seven quests to discover the answers. When they find the answer, they must decide the fate of the Jewels.

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Tuesday, February 28, 2023

Tuesday's Writer's Tip - The Middle - The Quest Plot #BWLAuthor #MFRWAuthor #writing #tip #Quest Plot #Middle

 The opening shows the object of the quest. The middle is a series of adventures on the way to reach that object. This gives much room for character development and also to show the coming change in the character. Think of the roller coaster headed for that final curve and home. The ups and downs of the character, some triumphs and some defeats leading toward the goal. There is action and reaction in this section of the quest plot.

I've always found this a fun part of the quest story to write.

 

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Tuesday, January 31, 2023

Tuesday's Writer's Tip - Plot and Character #BWLAuthor #MFRWAuthor #writing #plot #Character

 Plot and character are twined together like a vine around a tree. You can't have one without the other.  In stories plot is the guideline and characters are the actors. When an event happens characters react and this reaction brings change, There are stories that are more plot centered and others that are character centered. As the writer, you have to decide on the balance but forgetting or slighting one or the other can make the story fall flat.

So plot out your story and develop your characters. The events in the plot will cause your characters to react and for changes to happen.

 

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Tuesday, November 29, 2022

Tuesday's Writer's Tip - The Action Plot #BWLAuthor #MFRWAuthor #writing #plots #action

 Most genre fiction books belong to the large category here called the Action plot. You have your idea but you want to decide on the action or the plot of the mind. Finding the right path depends on if this is an adventure or a inner working of character.

In the Action plot, the pace is fast. The characters are involved in doing. Perhaps they're out to solve a murder, or find the right person, or seek to find some goal. These are elements of the Action plot. The writer of these plotted stories needs to stir the reader into thinking what comes next. The characters advance the plot. The action plot raises in the reader suspense surprise and expectation. So when you're working on an action plot, remember these three things.

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Friday, April 9, 2021

Join Kim McMahill as she talka about being a Panster or a Plotter #MFRWAuthor #Plotter #Panster #Plot #Characters

 

1. Are you a panster or a plotter or perhaps a bit of both? I’m definitely a bit of both. If the plot is exceptionally complex, I will plot. For example, in Shrouded in Secrets, I outlined most of the chapters, had a cork board with character profiles and other pertinent information, and used a map with pushpins and yarn to find geographic intersections. For the Risky Research Series as a whole, I predetermined how many books in the series, the title of each book, and which piece of the diet and nutrition industry would be highlighted in each novel. But the scenes and stories that I have the most fun writing are those where I can just sit down at the keyboard and let the characters and action inspire me to write off the cuff.

 

2. Which comes first - characters or plot for you? It varies. In Big Horn Storm, I had to have a cowboy named Deuce, and I wrote the story for him. In the Risky Research Series and several other novels, I had an idea for the stories and created the characters to pull off the action, adventure, and suspense.

 

3. What are you working on now? Is this a book in a current series or something totally new? I just released the fourth novel in the Risky Research Series, A Measure of Madness, and I’m currently working on the fifth and final installment, A Recipe for Revenge.

 

4. Do you have some kind of object or place that figures in most of your books? I use gems a lot, hospitals and caves. The Risky Research Series is all about the diet product, nutrition, and fitness industries and the science supporting those. However, most of my novels are more action/adventure based and I love remote unforgiving natural environments which adds an additional obstacle that the characters must overcome for success and a happily-ever-after ending.

 

5. Do you write everyday or just when the spirit hits? I can’t force creative writing. I just have to feel it. I do generally spend time everyday on various marketing projects like writing and programming blogs, and putting content on Twitter, Facebook, and Instagram, but novel writing comes more in spurts.

 

6. Where can we find you?

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7. Who are your favorite authors? What about a book you’ve enjoyed? I have read every book in Clive Cussler’s Dirk Pitt series. I don’t know if his son will continue with that series or not since Mr. Cussler’s passing, so I’ve started reading his other work. I also love James Rollins and Dan Brown. The element all these authors have in common is great adventures, amazing locations, and a gift for creating suspense.

 

Tuesday, March 30, 2021

Tuesday's Writer's Tip - Time to Tell #BWLAuthor #MFRWAuthor #Writer's Tip #Tell #Time

 When you're writing, one warning you always hear is show don't tell. Is this always the case. There is a time to tell and that is done by exposition. A bit of exposition will give the reader a break from the ongoing action. Done well this break can be welcome. Think of a movie you've seen. The setting and other things are shown through pictures. Not possible when writing a story of book unless it amy be a comic book. Telling is different from showing and necessary for a story. When I began writing, an editor once wrote, "Your characters are existing in a vacuum. You may know the setting but the reder has to have clues. Another pointed out the lack of cody language and physical descriptions of the characters. While the reader may use their imagination, some find it hard to stretch that far. So a bit of exposition can add spice and detail to a story.

Of course you can go overboard and suddenly there is more telling that showing. Finding the right balance is hard but is worthwhile. This is one of the secrets so don't totally avoid esposition and send your reader off on a journey od detatched scenes, Also don't have so much exposition, the story becomes lost in description.

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Tuesday, September 15, 2020

Tuesday's Writer's Tip Revision - Looking at Story and Structure -Action

You've finished your novel or your story. Are you ready to send it off? Probably now. There's one more thing you need to check rather than send it off with things for an editor to pick apart.

Action is one of these things. You'll need to read the whole book. There are a number of things to read for when you do this read through and with practice you won't have to read and re-read until you want to throw the entire thing in the trashcan.

Action tells you if you have a story. Does page after page and chapter after chapter pull the reader forward. Become the reader fresh to the story and the characters. Is something going on that makes you want to turn the page? Are the characters' wishes, and dreams and how they go about obtaining them clear? Does the beginning lead to the payoff. Sometimes writers spend so much time on the beginning of their story that they neglect the end. This doesn't have to be big drama ending but it needs to flow from that beginning.

Have you given the reader enough information? having them not knowing something you as the writer knows about the character or the plot doesn't work for the reader. But, there's always a but. Don't give them sso much information they're bogged down in a swamp.

Makesure the major scenes are played out to the hilt> I know sometimes when I'm rough drafting, I leave blanks in the scenes that I have to go back and fill in. Make sure you've filled them in enough to let the reader know this is an important scene.

Are there scenes that merely repeat something that happened in a scene before. Think about cutting this out or making drastic changes like in viewpoint.

Once you find the action flows to make the story cohesive, you're ready to more on to more steps. The more revision you do, the less you'll leave for an editor to do and maybe make changes that don't fit your view of the story.


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Tuesday, August 4, 2020

Tuesday's Writer's Tip - Revision - Dialogue #BWLAuthor #MFRWAuthor #Revision #amwriting #Dialogue

Part of looking at your characters is considering their dialogue. Have you ever read a book where all the characters sound like each other? Or one where the dialogue is so heavy with dialect you need a road map to know what people are saying. There's also the one where people talk and talk and say nothing. One way to look at your dialogue is to read it aloud. Just the speeches and not name the speaker. May mean a bit of extra work. Like typing out the dialogue lines on a sheet and reading them aloud. So revising dialogue is important to make your story sing. There are a number of points to consider. Practiced often enough and the writing becomes easier.

1. Remember dialogue is action and reaction. When your characters are talking to each other, what one say should bring a response from the one being spoken to. Means what they each says shows some kind of action and calls for a reaction. This doesn't necessarily mean a quarrel. Think of a heroine speaking to her best friend about choosing a dress to wear to an event. What she says triggers her friend's response. What if she's speaking to a non-friend. The answers would be different. Or speaking to her mother.

During the scene, there has to be movement as in body language, tone of voice. Without these, the words become flat. Does she scream, mumble the words. Are the responses emphatic or weak? If there's no interaction and no movement look at the passage again.

We'll be looking at more ways to enhance dialogue while revising in the next few posts.


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Saturday, March 30, 2019

Saturday's Blurbs feature A Book by Joan Havelange #MFRWAuthor #BWLPublishing #mystery #cozy #golf

Wayward Shot (Mabel and Violet̢۪s Excellent Adventures Book 1) by [Havelange, Joan]

When Mabel slices her golf ball into the town cemetery. She and her best friend Violet think the worst that could happen would be a lost ball. That is until they discover a dead body, and it isn't six feet under. Mabel's golf ball lays in the middle of his forehead, it’s murder.

The ladies take it upon themselves to solve the mystery of the dead body in the graveyard. Using the information gleaned from Coffee Row, a collection of eccentric townspeople. Leads them to investigate golfers and relatives of the deceased. Their investigation frustrates a newly appointed RCMP officer, who does his best to put a stop to their interference.
But nothing stops the intrepid detectives. Not the RCMP, a stampede of cattle or even shots fired at them in the dark. They have an uncanny ability to find trouble and dead bodies. Almost getting themselves killed before solving the murders

Thursday, August 25, 2016

Thursday's Opening Scene from Confrontations by Janet Lane Walters #MFRWauthor #fantasy #worldbuilding #action #magic #elements

ONE
 EASREN
ASHLEA

The time has come. Ash bolted upright. Her heart pounded with a beat reminiscent of one created by a mad drummer. Her gaze swept the room. She saw the other young women slept. Had someone spoken on the winds or had the words been part of a dream she couldn’t remember? When her racing heart slowed she cautiously opened her senses to read the winds of the keep. Using her affinity for Air she searched. The only person awake was the doma and the cry hadn’t arisen from the elderly woman.
Fingers of moonlight slid through the shuttered windows. She moved to the edge of the bed and pushed her feet into her house boots. Ash crept to the window to peer outside. She knelt on the stone bench and opened the shutters a crack. A gasp pushed past her lips when she saw the birds, one light and the other dark. The pair circled the keep.
She rubbed her arms to banish the chill of the late winter night. “Mama, Papa,” she whispered. “What does your arrival mean?”
Since the destruction of the Wesren henge the birds had appeared at auspicious moments. Sometimes the pair signaled safety and other times they brought a warning of danger. What was the meaning of this sighting?
“The time has come.” Softly she whispered the words. Like a jolt of lightning a thrill of excitement swept through her. Did that mean her and her halfling companions were ready to leave the safety of the keep and venture forth against their enemies? There were more opponents than she cared to face. She considered the number of doms and domas who followed Dom Senet, the four halflings he’d trained plus Zand’s former step-mother and her two sons. A shudder rolled through her body. There was also the voice of evil she’d heard on the winds.
Two years and a season had passed since the return from the quests for the remaining halflings, the heirs and the talismans. The sixteen companions had worked hard to gain mastery of their affinities of the elements. Four whose element was  Air, four Fire, four Earth and four Water united in four mixed quartets. A sliver of fear stabbed. Were they ready? She fought a desire to return to her bed and pull the covers over her head.
As the edge of the sun appeared above the distant mountains Ash closed the shutters. She thought about the birds and knew hiding was as impossible as a return to sleep. Not while her emotions rose and fell in waves. Should she wake the others and tell them about the birds? She frowned. If she did Ky, her younger sister, would scold and rouse everyone in the keep.
Ash grabbed her clothes and dashed to the necessary to wash and dress. Before she stirred the others into action she had to speak to Doma Jandia. Perhaps their teacher could interpret the meaning of the words and the arrival of the birds.
As she hurried down the stairs she quested for the doma. The elderly woman wasn’t in her room on the fourth level of the keep. The doma’s mind scent rose from the stillroom. When Ash dashed from the third level to the second she heard stirrings from the chamber where her brothers and the other male halflings slept. Since she wanted advice before those with affinities plied her with questions she grasped the railing and sped downstairs.
On the first level she scurried along the hall and opened the door of the stillroom. Shelves on one wall held jars of various herbs, spices and flowers. Ash tasted the air as she’d been taught and isolated attars of roses, lavender and the scent of rosemary.
The elderly woman who had taught Ash and her siblings since the day they’d found refuge with her sat on a bench at a stone table. She rested a pestle in the mortar, turned and smiled. Hair turned to silver by age framed the doma’s lined face. The gaze from her brilliant green eyes met Ash’s. In contrast to the copper-hued skin of the halflings, Doma Jandia’s was as pale as linen bleached by the sun. Until this moment Ash hadn’t realized how much the doma had aged.
“You’re astir early,” Doma Jandia said.
Ash nodded. “I heard a voice and saw the birds.”
The light of knowing flashed in the elderly woman’s eyes. “Tell me the entire story.”
In a few words Ash spoke of her awakening. “Do you think the time has come for us to leave the keep?”
The doma nodded. “I believe so. Though I would rather keep you here and safe you young people have a destiny. You have learned all I can teach you and more since you aren’t afraid to try new approaches. Yes, you’re ready to begin cleansing the princedoms. Once that is accomplished you can confront Senet and his allies.”
Those words caused Ash to straighten her shoulders. Fear and excitement slithered through her thoughts. Her breath caught. “Are you sure?” The time had come but she wavered between action and retreat.
The doma left the table. “Senet is on the move. I don’t know what he plans but the air in the highlands shimmers with strange energies.”
Ash’s hands clenched. “How much danger do he and his cronies pose for us?”
Doma Jandia grasped one of Ash’s hands and uncurled the tightened fingers. “He has full use of all four elements. Alone he can overpower any two or three of you unless you are joined in quartets of both mixed or a single element. When you are he cannot overcome the meld formed even when you are distant from each other. Know that to be the truth.”
Some of the churning in Ash’s gut subsided. “Where should we go first?” The desire to avoid Dom Senet was foremost in her thoughts. She fought dark waves of fear threatening to engulf her. She couldn’t forget the times he had invaded her thoughts in attempts to lure her into his web. A vision of a huge black spider with the face of the dom made her shiver.
He’s not here. You have barriers against him.
What if he can break them?
Doma Jandia stroked Ash’s hand. “You are safe. Though in the days to come you will face danger you are strong enough to defeat him."
“I pray you’re right.” Ash swallowed. “Where must we go first?”
“The four princedoms must be cleansed. Begin in Easren, then Soutren, Nortren and Wesren in that order. By the time the four are cleansed the sixteen of you will be ready to face Senet.”
“Why in that order?”
“’Tis the order of the destruction of the henges and the murders of the doms and domas who lived in them. In Easren the damage has lasted the longest. With the approach of spring the conditions have become dire.” The doma stepped back. “Assemble your companions and tell them the time for action has come. Use the inner room where the layers of protection are the strongest. Set no plans in the open.”
“Why?”
“Lest you be over heard by Senet when he’s reading the winds.”
“How will we know where to go?”
“Let your gems lead you.”
Ash paused in the doorway. “Do you think the barriers over the keep have eroded?”
The doma pressed a hand on the long table. “I pray not but where Senet is involved there’s no reason to take chances. As you have discovered there are places in the highlands where the winds cannot be read.”
Ash nodded. “Do you think he’s present in one of those places?”
“Perhaps. I will seek but I may not learn.” The doma smiled. “Go, break your fast, see to your chores and make your plans.”
Ash hurried to the huge kitchen where the sounds of meal preparation and the aroma of cooking food scented the air. She listened to the chatter of her friends and knew her news would end their banter.
Her twin, Bran and their friend, Zand, stood at the fireplace and swung a huge kettle from the flames. Together they carried this to the serving table. Ky and Jay, her younger siblings, stood at a brazier and turned flatcakes and slices of cured shoat. Other friends gathered near the serving table and selected the food they needed to break their fast.
Ash joined the line. She carried a bowl of porridge to the granite table. She sat on a bench and reached for honey. When all were seated she cleared her throat. “We must meet in the inner room when our chores are finished.”
Zand arched a brow. “Why?”
“Tell you when we’re all there.” She bent her head and ate. When she finished she began her day’s chore of cleaning the kitchen and starting soup for the midday meal. As soon as she completed her share she scurried to the room behind the tower stairs. Here, no windows were present. When sealed the single tightly fitted door prevented spying. Even the stones of the wall were bonded with a sealant.
Several stacks of pillows rested against one wall. Ash chose one and then walked to the shelves holding books and maps. She selected a rolled one of the princedom of Easren.
Before long her companions arrived. Sydli, the last to enter, used her affinity for Air to seal the door. Now, no one other than those in the room could hear what was said. Neither could any sound from outside enter the sanctuary.
The others chose their places. Ash noticed how they clustered in their mixed quartets. She waited until everyone sat. In one hand she clutched the map. “The time has come for us to leave the keep.”
Gasps greeted the announcement. Zand leaned forward. “Are you sure?”
Ash nodded. “This is what I heard and saw.” She related the tale of the voice and the appearance of the birds.
“That’s not fair.” Ky glared. “Why didn’t you wake me? I wanted to see them.”
“I was so entranced by the sight I couldn’t move,” Ash said. “They haven’t appeared since we began our studies. When they vanished I dressed and went to Doma Jandia. She said we’re ready to begin. First we must cleanse Easren where the first henge was destroyed and the keepers died.”
“All of us?” Zand asked.
Ky bounded to her feet. “When do we leave?”
Ash waved her impetuous sister down. She unrolled the map of the princedom of Easren. After removing the clear white gem identifying her affinity as Air she held it over the map. “Where should my quartet go?” Slowly the stone revolved. The chain stiffened and pointed north and east. Ash moved along the side of the map. Once again the chain drooped and the stone spun. Ash marked the spot on the map. “This is my group’s destination.”
One by one the others with an affinity for Air used their gems to find the spot in the princedom where they must go. Sydli’s stone halted above Easrenton where the palace stood. Kirlon’s group would travel to where the Ruran River vanished near Soutren. The final group was Mikel’s. They would travel to the lake surrounding the drowned henge.
“What now?” Mikel asked.
“We need to make plans,” Ash said.
Ky bolted to the door. “Let’s go.” The others with a Fire affinity followed her.
“Not yet,” Ash called. “We can’t run around like emmets stirred from their nest.”
“Who has the furthest to go?” Jay asked.
“Kirlon’s group,” Bran said.
Ash drew a deep breath. “We need plans. We’ll need supplies. People in Easren will have little to share.”
Jay nodded. “Fire affinities should check the coursers and see if they’re fit. If any need shod Earth affinities can help. They should also see to the panniers.”
“What are you going to do?” Zand asked.
“See to food supplies.”
Bran rose. “Water affinities will make medicinal packs for us and for the animals.”
“Then Air will see to clothes, tents and sleep saques,” Ash said.
Ky reached the door. “What are we waiting for? Zand, Rogier, Tamlia, come with me.”
Bran halted beside Ash. “Since rain and flooding are the problems in Easren I believe the Water affinities will take the lead in the cleansing. We should discuss this before we leave.”
Ash nodded. “If we can keep Ky from galloping off with her sword spouting flames.”
He chuckled then pointed to the map. “If lines are drawn from the other foci, they meet at the edge of the drowned henge. Do you think that will be true in all the princedoms?”
“I’m not thinking of any place other than Easren.”
He groaned. “You know how I hate surprises.”
Ash piled the pillows at the side of the room. What were the conditions in Easren? She knew about the rain and floods. But what about the people? She decided to search the winds.
Not in here. If she closed the door the barrier would prevent a search. If the door remained open the protection could be destroyed.
She hurried from the keep into the forecourt. There she turned and stared at the gray stones of the tower. Sadness blossomed. The keep was home and family. She brushed her hand over the rough stones. With a sigh she sank on a bench and leaned against the wall. Warmth and comfort seeped from the surface.
Ash opened herself to the winds of thought. Without warning, a stab from the highlands touched her. Like the sting of a scorpon’s tail someone tried to jab into her mind. Help! She slammed her barriers tight. Who? Not Dom Senet. His touch felt oily and tempting. This had been crude and demanding.
Mikel and Kirlon slid onto the bench on either side of her. Sydli crouched before her. Their arrival brought comfort to ease the chill of fear. “What was that?” Sydli asked.
Ash released a held breath. “Not the dom. Rougher. Greedier.”
“What were you trying to do?” Mikel asked.
“Listening to the winds of Easren.”
“Good idea but we should form a circle,” Kirlon said. “I’ll block against intrusion.”
They clasped hands. Ash felt the merge form. She reached for the winds of Easren. Cries of hunger, fear and despair echoed through the meld. Rain fell two days out of four. Rivers and streams overflowed their banks. Soon melt from ice and snow in the highlands would add to the deluge.
When Ash broke the circle she met the gaze of her friends. “The doma was right. If we don’t go now there will be no spring planting. Famine and death will follow.” She rose. “The time is now.”




Sunday, August 7, 2016

Sunday's Books - Havens (Affinities Book 2) #MFRWauthor #fantasy #YA # action #magic

The four teens, led by the mysterious birds they believe are their parents seek a place of safety where they can learn to control their affinities. They find a place of refuge with Doma Jandia, grandmother of their friend Zand. The doma plans to take them to the highlands but news of the capture of two of their friends by Dom Senet, sends them on a rescue mission. Their powers are not strong enough to defeat the evil dom. They must find a way to succeed or their friends will be corrupted forever.

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Wednesday, August 26, 2015

Wedensday's Writer's Tip - Using Action #MFRWauthor #amwriting


Action is important in writing a story. But action doesn't necessarily mean sword fights, or car chases or the like. In writing a story action means scenes. An action scene can just be two people talking, laughing or dancing. Even eating a meal. By action we mean something needs to be shown to the reader. An invitation to be part of the story. Yes these can be tension filled scenes but they can also be quiet or funny. In one of my stories the heroine climbs from her balcony to the hero's balcony. There's some action and a bit of humor but the reader also gets to know the characters better and to see what might happen in the story.

There are large scenes and ones that are smaller. Think of two people in an argument when they are standing on opposite sides of an issue. Think of a scene where the characters are discussing an important coming event. Big scenes are for the times when opposing factions meet. This creates tension and conflict, important parts of a story. Opponents is a large scene are out to eliminate each other or make the problem go away.

Small scenes are a way of giving the reader important information such as characterization, of during a conversation where the problem needs to be clarified.

Scenes should be used when something important in happening. Narration can handle something the reader needs to know but is something minor.

Wednesday, April 18, 2012

Wednesday's Writer's Tip - Patterns in Action


Action doesn't mean just fights and car chases and other scenes with physical action being the focus. Action is what moves the story forward. Action isn't just a series of scenes that are connected. When I first began writing I thought I knew what I was doing. After many wonderful rejections where the editors kindly wrote about one thing I was doing wrong. I remember one that I read. "If you start with a bomb or a riot where the hero and heroine are threatened with death, what are you going to write next that pulls the reader along." This hit me that action is a progression. No matter what kind of story you're writing each action in the story must lead to the next one and must increase the stakes for the characters.

Action builds tension and gains momentum in a story. This requires pacing. A fellow writer once read my sort of 'Medical suspense" Obsessions and remarked on a look we both belonged to. "Janet is a master at pacing." This totally surprised me because I wasn't sure what he meant. I did a whole lot of study about what pacing meant. This story starts with the unnamed villain watching the hospital parking lot and failing to achieve his goal. Not much later, the heroine discovers the body of a nat so nice fellow worker in the "orthopedic" storage room. This is the triggering situation and the deaths begin. Each one comes closer to the heroine and so the tension builds. Especially when the heroine receives gifts left my an unnamed admirer. These gifts are the typical ones one mught see in a courtship. This added another layer of tension, yet these scenes weren't physically active.

So as you write each scene think about what the scene contributes to the building finale of the story. If a scene doesn't really add to the tension, take it out or change it until you can feel the tentsion rising. Sort of like Slowly he walked and so forth. Build a pattern and make sure each scene advances not only the story but also the tension. Don't give away too much too soon and don't delay too long. Actions show the pattern of cause and effect.

Friday, October 1, 2010

Writer's Tip More on Characterization.

When writing a fiction piece, there are many ways to show characterization and bring the people in the stories to life.

Conflict is one of the ways characters are shown. A character can be in conflict with his environment, with himself or with another character. The character's actions and reactions to a conflict situation will reveal his true nature.

Action is another way to reveal a character's nature, how does he walk, what are his mental and emotional reactions to a situation calling for action? Knowing these things before describing the character in motion can add to the picture of who he or she is.

There are a number of types of tags that will characterize a story person. These include physical tags, such as the blond hunk or the skinny geek, appearance tags. Does the character wear what for them has become a uniform. He'd never seen her in a dress. Didn't he have anything to wear other than those ragged cutoffs. Mannerism tags. Does the character have a definite mannerism, such as running his hands through her hair or her twisting a strand of hair around her finger when she's nervous. Facial expression tags, Arching the eyebrow, a permanent scowl.

These are a few ways to show characters to the reader. Next week, I'll add more.

Friday, September 17, 2010

Writing tips -- action

Just what is action? Any time the characters are talking or moving is action. This is shown by developing a scene giving the reader a chance to identify with the characters. Scenes are used to characterize and there are large scenes and small scenes. Scenes are developed when an event is interesting, important or exciting.

A large scene is used when conflict occurs. There is a pattern. A meeting, an exploration of the conflict, a suggestion to the result and the result which may solve or deepen the conflict. This can be dome by showing the characters in movement, in movement plus dialogue or by dialogue only. In the conflict the opponents must want to eliminate, win, outlast or pacify the other party to the conflict. These large scenes can be used to show major or minor conflicts.

There's nothing worse that reading a story where what could be a major conflict is told rather than shown.

Minor scenes are used to characterize. to convey information the reader needs to understand the story and where needed to advance the story.

Wednesday, May 5, 2010

Writing Tips Plotting continued

This is part 2 of Plotting. All stories have a beginning, a middle and an end. Before talking about the beginning, there are several things to remember.

Three places to begin your tale.
1. A moment before the action that will force a change in the hero or heroine's life.
2. In the middle of the action.
3. A moment after the action has taken place.

Another important series of three to remember. Each scene, bit of dialogue should do one of the following things. If you can bring two about, that's great. Hitting all three is wonderful.
1. Reveal something about the character.
2. Advance the plot.
3. Impart an important piece of information.

Keeping these things in mind, it's time to begin. The beginning of the book can be as much as a third of the book and must show the characters in action, to learn about their motivations, establish the conflicts both internal and external, show the setting and the time period. Often the book is started too soon or too late. There are times when I write a chapter one and find the only value is for me as the writer, not the reader. It's time to scrap that chapter. Other times I start a book too late and have to go back and do a scene before the one I originally intended to be the opening scene.

There are problems that happen during the opening of a book. Often times the first paragraph is intriguing. Then the writer spends pages giving the back story of the characters. A sentence or two won't bother the reader but paragraphs about the hero or heroine's life are more for the author's benefit than the reader. Save this kind of the story for times when it can be done in a sentence or two of through dialogue. Another problem is when the author becomen enamoured by the setting and spends paragraphs describing a house, a vista or something. In fantasies, sometimes more time is needed to establish where the characters are but these are details that can be brought into play during the action.

The opening scene is where the writer has to give enough information to intrigue the reader to comtinue reading. There are several problems that can creep in. There's the information dump that provides the reader with too much information. This can be back story or it can be scenery or other descriptions. There is the cast of thousands start where too many charactera are thrown into the mix in the first few pages. For me this is one of my faults. There is also starting with a dramatic scene like a car chase ro a volcano erupting and the hero or heroine fleeing from some drastic event. Problem here is how can the tension be maintained for the entire book. A hard act to follow is what I call this kind of opening.