Wednesday, February 18, 2015

Wednesday's Writer's Tip based on From First Draft to Finished Novel #MFRWauthor #BooksWeLove


Karen Wiesner is a friend, a good writer and gives great advide. I often use one of her reference books as a base for going off on my own. Adding my own take on this. In her book cited above she has some good words on creating sexual tension when writing romance novels. I'll probably use this segment for several Wednesdays.

1, Let your characters decide the level of intimacy.  Of course, as the writer you've created these characters and you're really in control but you need to remember when writing the story that your characters are in charge, so to speak. My experience with this has been interesting. One character I created really liked being physically intimate with the man in her life. He felt the same. Neither of them wanted any emotional baggage between them. Was this a problem? Sometimes. In another story, the heroine stated there would be nothing beyond kisses and a bit of petting in her story. Though I tried for more, I finally realized what I was aiming for didn't fit the character.

The moral of this is while you let your characters choose, as the writer you need to know your characters and listen to them.

2. Make the love scenes realistic. I usually have no problem with this but can err on the side of realism. Too much reality isn't good for fiction. If your characters aren't real, your love scenes won't be either.

Know your characters.

3. Use exaggerated awareness. I read almost as much as I write though not always in the romance field. I've read romance books where hero and heroine have no awareness of each other in more than a wooden way. Think of how they react to a touch, to a smile, to a word. This goes for hero and heroine though not in the same scene by bouncing from head to head. Your hero can notice things about what the heroine does to him physically and emotionally while showing the scene from his point of view. The same goes for the heroine, Sticking with one can heighten the suspense and rev up the anticipation while showing your reader just how these people are becoming aware of each other.

Watch your characters.

More next time.

Monday, February 16, 2015

Tuesday's Inspiration - Based on a quote from Richard Lockridge


"To write a good mystery novel you must write a good novel."  I think this applies to any kind of novel you sit down to write. We've all read books that are great for a single read but not so many that make you want to return and read it again.

In writing the first thing is the characters. They must be those who manage to make the reader believe they are real people not just characters stamped out to fit the story. I've had some successes and some failures when creating characters. I'm sure we all have. I often wonder why one character grabs readers and why others don't.

The scenes need to be those that draw the reader in. When I'm writing there are times when I completely re-write what was a nice scene but it wasn't a gripping scene. Not that it bored me, but it didn't make me sit up and laugh, shout or even scream. There have also been scenes that really are boring and hopefully those don't get by my editorial eye.

A writer needs to be both a story teller and a critic. For one's own work that is hard but it's something that needs to be developed. Also needs to be turned off and turned on. Hard but necessary.

Meandering on Monday with Janet Lane Walters #MFRWauthor #BooksWeLove


Meander 1 - Interesting messages I've been reading. It's about reviews, sort of. The authors are self-published. Some of these books are wonderful. What really made me laugh when reading these comments is that I've been in the place where they have been. Readers complaining about the mistakes in the books. Sometimes there are no misspelled or wrong words that are really right words. The readers are saying these are awful and books by major publishers are better edited. As someone who began early in electronic books, I received the same comments on my stories from readers. I believe with these others that these can occur and do occer no matter how many eyes have read the books looking for errata. But I've found then in NY books, EPubed books and self-published books. I'm never annoyed with them unless they've used the wrong word constantly in a book.

Meander 2 -Time. There are never enough hours in a day to do everything I want to do. I'm working on it but not succeeding very well. I do not do well whenI don't meet my goals and I crash and want to burn. I also don't like waiting for news.

Meander 2 The Goddesses of Solunda is moving forward. Wanted to be finished by tomorrow but probably won't. There is one chapter to type in and then 10 more to read through to make correstions. Then these have to be typed in. The good thing is the book will meet the 70000 words wanted plus a few more. The bad thing is that there will be at least one or maybe two books to do to finish the story. I've left the villains unpunished and that I don't like. But before I move along I have another book to complete and several right back books, actually five to get ready to be re-published.

Sunday, February 15, 2015

Sunday's Book - The Amber Chronicles #BooksWeLove #MFRWauthor


Love this cover and this author - my mentor and friend!


Amber Chronicles Collection: Emme, a witch and the heir to the throne of the world called Amber is banished from her home to find love. She believes she can command a man to love her but this does not work. Angry at being told no by the crown prince of Rivand she casts a spell on the Riva family. Every hundred years when the moon is full at the summer solstice she will call the crown prince. If he refuses to cede his love to her he will enter the amber orb and vanish. Four times she fails and the princes find adventure on other worlds. One turns an enchanted amber dragon into a princess. The second is imprisoned in an amber tower and must select a bride. The third must free the heroine from an amber cage. Emme slowly learns her lesson and returns to spend her childhood with the fourth prince. Hoping knowing each other will help. She has fallen in love with the crown prince and enters the amber orb in his place. Can Emme who is Cast in Amber be freed and gain the love she has sought for all those years?

FOUR STARS! The witch's curse of zapping princes into an amber orb is one of my favorites. This story is the fate of the very first prince. It reads much like a fairy tale, where at least one moral is to be learned. An enchanting fantasy. **** Detra Fitch

5.0 out of 5 stars Janet Lane Walters does it again. March 8, 2014
Format:Kindle Edition
JLW has written another winner. Her talent for world building has made her a favorite in the fantasy field. Strong characters draw you in and don't let go until the last page.

Amber Chronicles 

http://www.barnesandnoble.com/w/the-amber-chronicles-janet-lane-walters/1120344683?ean=9781771452724

Saturday, February 14, 2015

Saturday's Blurbs - Books by Joan Donaldson Yarmey

Blurb for Gold Fever
Boni Baldwin is taken out of the city and thrust into an environment she dislikes-- camping. Her mother, Elsie Wiggins, is on a quest to find information on her father who disappeared fifty-five years ago in the mountains of southern British Columbia and Boni is the only one of her children who is able, but reluctant, to accompany her.

The first person they meet is Rick, a mountain man who has a claim on the Salmo River and is prospecting with his grandfather for gold. He offers to show Boni around the area hoping to convince her that being in the bush is not a terrible thing. They also meet Jerry, who is the one Elsie contacted about camping on his gold claim. Jerry offers to show Elsie how to pan for gold during her stay. Boni and Elsie are threatened by other prospectors along the river and told to leave. When they don't, their campsite is trashed, twice. This scares Boni but only makes Elsie mad. No Rambo wannabees are going to frighten her away. They do discover some new clues about Elsie's father after all these years, but all that comes to an end when the man they are scheduled to interview is murdered before they get to his house. As much as they hate to admit it, both Rick and Jerry are on their list of suspects for the trashing of their campsite and for the murder.

Gold Fever

Blurb for the Travelling Detective Series (boxed set)
So far there are three books in The Travelling Detective Series and all three are in this one boxed set. Elizabeth Oliver, the main character, is a nursing attendant who's dream of becoming a travel writer is slowly coming true. She has had a few articles published in various travel magazines and in the first book of the series, Illegally Dead, she has an assignment from one of them to write an article on the Crowsnest Highway in southern Alberta. On her way to the bed and breakfast where she will be staying with her dog, Chevy, while doing her research, she meets two men who have discovered a skeleton in a septic tank. She had solved the mystery of a woman's death the year before while working on a speculative article and now feels the pull of this mystery.

In the second book, The Only Shadow In The House, there is a combination of three genres: mystery, travel, and poetry as one character tells her story through her poetry. This time, Elizabeth Oliver's boyfriend, Jared, asks her to help him find out if someone had actually murdered his mother thirty years ago when he was just four-years-old. As the story develops, Jared learns that his mother was not the angel he thought he remembered and that there were a number of people who had reason to kill her. While working on this mystery, the stabbing death of a man around the same time becomes entangled in their search.

Whistler's Murder takes place in the resort town of Whistler B.C. in the summer. Elizabeth Oliver's best friend, Sally Matthews, is attending a science fiction writing retreat and Elizabeth goes along to write an article on Whistler in the summer and to relax. They stay at a bed and breakfast near the retreat and on the second day of their stay a partially decomposed body of a young woman is discovered when the house next door is demolished. Word gets around that Elizabeth has solved mysteries in the past and a neighbour woman secretly tries to hire Elizabeth to find out who had killed the young woman. Elizabeth protests that she is not a detective and cannot accept any payment but the woman insists. Finally, Elizabeth agrees and goes through the motions of acting like a detective on television. While this is happening, Sally is approached by a fellow student to help her find out about the death of her cousin two years earlier at the same retreat. When that student also dies, Elizabeth steps in to assist Sally.

Books of The Travelling Detective Series boxed set:
Illegally Dead
The Only Shadow In The House
Whistler's Murder



Friday, February 13, 2015

Friday with Joan Donaldson Yarmey - Talking About Heroes, Heroines and Villains #BooksWeLove #MFRWauthor

1. Do you write a single genre or do your fingers flow over the keys creating tales in many forms? Does your reading choices reflect your writing choices? Are there genres you wouldn’t attempt?
I began my writing career as a travel writer. I drove and camped throughout British Columbia, Alberta, the Yukon, and Alaska learning about what there is to see and do along all their roads. But I love reading a good mystery novel and some of them I didn't think were very good, especially when some clues were so obvious that I could guess who had done it and why quite early in the book. I decided to try my hand at mystery writing. I have written three amateur sleuth novels with the main character being a travel writer. Collectively, they are called The Travelling Detective Series and they were published by Books We Love Ltd and are sold in a boxed set. My latest novel is a slight departure in that it is a mystery/romance combination. I have written manuscripts in different genres but I have never had the urge to write a western, historical or erotica.

2. Heroes, Heroines, Villains. Which are your favorite to write? Does one of these come easy and why?
Heroes and heroines come easiest for me to write and they are my favourites. I like to think I am a normal, polite, nice person who could never scam, beat, or kill another human being, therefore it is harder for me to get inside a villain's head to write about him or her. Therefore, I do a lot of true crime reading to get in a murderous frame of mind.

3. Heroes. How do you find them? Do pictures, real life or plain imagination create the man you want every reader to love? Do they come before the plot or after you have the idea for the story?
In my mystery novels my heroes have been an older man and a young men in a wheel chair. In my mystery/romance the hero is a mountain man/gold prospector. Once I have the plot and the hero's character decided then I begin to built his body. Sometimes, though, they tell me who they really are as the story develops. I do have pictures of movie stars and regular people from the newspapers on a wall so I can use certain looks, like hair styles or clothes.

4. Heroines. How do you find them? Do pictures, real life or imagination create the woman you want the reader to root for? Do they appear before the plot or after you have the idea for the story?
In my Travelling Detective Series, the main character is a woman who has several of my traits. (I'm mentioning this because I've had friends tell me, after reading the book, "I could hear you saying that" or "That's something you would do.") In my mystery/romance my heroine is nothing like me but is loosely based on someone I know. Like my heroes, my heroines sometimes change character traits as I get into the story. I also have pictures of women on my wall for the same reason as I have pictures of men.

5. Villains or villainesses or an antagonist, since they don’t always have to be the bad guy or girl. They can be a person opposed to the hero’s or heroine’s obtaining their goal. How do you choose one? How do you make them human?
The villain's job is to cause all the turmoil in a novel. Some villains are good at it, some are not. But since their true nature isn't revealed until the end it is necessary to seed a few instances where the person does unusual things so that when he or she is revealed, the reader isn't going "How could she have suddenly changed like that?" Instead, the reader should be saying, "I should have guessed it was him."

6. What is your latest release? Who is the hero, heroine and or the villain?
My latest release is Gold Fever also through Books We Love Ltd. The heroine is a city girl who is camping for a week with her mother and she hates it. The hero/villian is a mountain man/gold prospector who takes it upon himself to show her around the countryside. She is not impressed. The villain could be the mountain man/gold prospector or any one of four other gold prospectors.

7. What are you working on now?
I have two projects on the go. One is non-fiction about four cats in a motorhome for a ten week sightseeing trip and the other is a Christmas romance.

8. How can people find you?
            Blogs I contribute to:
http://bookswelove.net/
http://thetravellingdetectiveseries.blogspot.com/

            Facebook: http://www.facebook.com/writingsbyjoan


Thursday, February 12, 2015

Thursday's Heroine - Ashiera From Moon Summoned #MFRWauthor #BooksWeLove

            
Twilight darkened the sky before Ashiera found a hiding place in a dark alley doorway. The stench of rotting fish and the brine-laden air made her swallow against the burning fluid that rose in her throat. Rustling noises brought a prayer that none of the alley’s denizens would attack her. She dozed, woke and dozed again. Memories of the past rose in broken fragments, but each time she woke, she found more pieces were joined.

Sieper. Bits of the things she’d heard years ago in the marketplace were remembered. Rumors of his ability to read the weather surfaced. How could he possess such a talent? The Mistress touched women, never men. Did he serve the Lord of Shadows? He’d spoken of ownership and of her as being a reward from the Cabal. Had Sieper been one of the men who had lurked and awaited the arrival of the gray priests?

She sighed. Would she ever regain all the memories of the time before her capture?

She rolled the too long trouser legs and used a scrap of cloth torn from her gown as a belt. The sleeves of the shirt hung well below her hands and she pushed them up. How fortunate she’d been to find Sieper’s clothes on the line. As she’d fled through the alleys, she’d peered into the streets. The few women she’d seen had been escorted by one or even several men.

While she waited for true dark, she fingered the scar on her wrist. Her hand flew to her mouth and she stifled a scream.

An obese man, head shaved and scalp oiled, faced her. He held a metal rod with a serpent curled around the staff. A globe of swirling mist topped the rod. Her body trembled. The evil in the priest’s thoughts nauseated her. The serpent raised its head. The fangs bit into her wrist and sent molten fire through her veins. An endless scream echoed in her head and she sought darkness as she had before.

When Ashiera emerged from the place where night was eternal, a few stars shone in the sky. A pale sliver moon had risen. She struggled to her feet and exercised muscles stiffened by the cramped position.

Flee. Leave the city.

The urgency of the command made her lose all caution. “Who are you?”

The Place of Choosing. You must go there.

“Where is this place?

In the Shanara Mountains.

As she left the wharf area, she slid from shadow to shadow. Now and then she heard footsteps, but whoever walked the streets moved with the same caution she employed. Finally the waterfront lay behind and she strode along a broad avenue where the Seat of Judgment stood behind a high wall. The Seat was no longer a refuge since the gray priests resided there now. Shepas barked warnings. Several times she froze and fought the urge to run and, perhaps draw attention to her flight.

At last, she reached the market near the north gate. Guards in gray uniforms trimmed with waxy yellow marched two by two in front of the gate. Was she trapped? Was there no way out of the city?
She slipped between two stalls and slid beneath a peddler’s wagon. The cold of the rough stone cobbles seeped through her clothes and made her shiver. She leaned against one of the wooden wheels and, despite her discomfort drifted to sleep.

Voices woke her. She peered around the wheel and saw two men.

“’Tis the first day of the last lunar of the year. An auspicious day to begin our journey.”

“Father, watch your tongue. ‘Tis the first day of Dar. If you plan to remain on the road, you must learn the words our new rulers have ordained.”

The first man laughed. “Peto, my son, you will do well. An old man has trouble remembering new ways. Are we set to leave?”

“The wagons are loaded. The cart is stocked. Our permits have been bought and signed. All we must do is pay the gate tax.”

“You go. ‘Tis my last trip as master peddler. Time for an old man to sit by the fire and tell his grandchildren tales of the road.”

“Then harness the bovies while I’m gone.”

Ashiera watched until the younger man left. She crept from her hiding place. Surely one who failed to learn the new ways would help her.

“Months, not lunars,” the old man muttered. “Not allowed to speak about the Mistress.” He led a pair of massive brown beasts to the first wagon and fastened them in the traces. “Blessed be the Mistress. Years ago her seer predicted a son for Sari and me. A miracle for a woman past her fortieth year.”

“Peddler,” Ashiera whispered.

He turned. His dark brown hair was touched with strands of ebony. “A woman in men’s clothes. If the priests find you, they’ll drag you to their pens.”

She pushed up the sleeve of her shirt. “I’ve been there.”

He drew closer. “You!” A reverent tone crept into his voice. “You are the one who said I’d have a son.”

Ashiera had no memory of his face among the many seekers at the Seat of Judgment. “I pray my prediction brought you joy.”

“He has.” He touched her wrist. “Why did they mark you?”

She shuddered and pushed the dark memories away. “My mind fled under their torture.”

He dropped his cloak around her shoulders. “Tales are told of the ones who resisted and died, and of one who accepted, but none of you. How can I help?”

“I must reach the Shanara Mountains by lunar’s end. Is there a way out of the city?”

“’Tis a far way to travel.” He nodded. “Small steps must come first.” He harnessed the bovies, then opened the door of a brightly painted wagon. “Years ago, my spouse traveled with me. Our son was born in this bed.” He lifted the mattress and a wooden frame. “For storage. A small space, but once we’re past the gates, I’ll let you out, though you must stay in the wagon. We travel with some who fawn on the priests.”

Ashiera traced the sign of the Mistress in the air and took hope from the golden glow. “Blessed be. Have you water? I would drink before I hide.”

He filled a cup. “I’m Penro.”

“Thanks be.” She savored the water and drank a second cup before climbing into the cubby.

When Penro replaced the frame and mattress, she fought the urge to scream. Memories of her imprisonment by the Cabal filled her thoughts. Before the snake had marked her, she’d been kept in a small dark pit for days. The stale air, the cramped position and the absence of light in this hiding place seemed the same.

The cart moved, then stopped for what seemed like hours. Her nails bit into her palms and her heart thudded. If they found her, what would she do? Finally, the cart rolled forward. The gentle rocking movements lulled her to sleep.

When she woke, the cubby was hot and the air flat. Sweat made her clothes cling to her body. She gulped deep breaths until her head spun. Frantically she pushed against the wooden frame. Tears rolled down her face. Then a rush of cool air reached her.

“’Tis night.” Penro helped her from the small space. “You slept through the day. Couldn’t wake you when we stopped at midday. There’s food and drink on the table and some coins I’ve collected from those who won’t betray you. I’ve the names of several inns on your way where the Mistress is honored in secret. My friend, Thamis, has clothes for you.”

Ashiera stretched her aching body. “Are there many who oppose the priests?”

He shrugged. “In every village and hamlet there are those who keep Her in their hearts, but there are no leaders. The warriors from the Hall of Defense were defeated. Her servants in the nomes across the mountains have refused to join the battle. The taxes for women tear families apart. Few have coins to pay so their daughters can escape the pens.”

Ashiera sat at the table. “Taxes for women?” She dipped a spoon in the bowl of stew. Though she wanted to gulp, she ate slowly.

He nodded. “Each man of Keltoi can have but one woman of child-bearing age in his house. For all others he must pay a tax.”

“Abomination.”

“Indeed ‘tis that.” He filled a mug with hot, spiced tea. “Where once daughters were a blessing, they’re now a curse. Rumors of hidden places in the forest and hills spread among the people, but what parent would send a child into the wilderness?”

Ashiera considered his words. Always more women than men were born, but there had been places among the servants of the Mistress for those who chose not to take a spouse. She shook her head. “Their ways are evil.”

He nodded. “Finish your meal. I’ll return soon with Thamis.” He slipped from the wagon.

Ashiera felt sadness enshroud her. What happened to those girls who were taken by the priests and put in the pens? A flash of memory shook her. The girls had been auctioned for nights of service with any number of men. Some were sent to serve the priests in their houses. She shuddered. “Mistress, why has this evil come upon us? How did we fail You?”

When Penro returned, a short man with dark brown hair followed her. He dropped a bundle on the bed. “Thamis, she is the one,’ Penro said.

“Blessed be.” The symbol Ashiera sketched glowed.

“Thanks for your blessing.” Thamis bowed. “Penro said you were more my size than his. I’m honored to serve someone who belongs to the Mistress.”

She opened the bundle. “My thanks to you.”

“Two of my daughters served in a House of Healing. My youngest son died defending them.”

“The priests carried the war even to the healers?”

“Even there,” Penro said. “They slaughtered the sick. ‘Tis said they gain power from pain and death.”

Anger made Ashiera tremble, but now wasn’t the time for action. Quickly she changed into Thamis’ clothes. She embraced Penro. “Your house will prosper.”

He bowed. “If you have a need, I will come.”

“Listen to the winds for a call.”

She followed Thamis outside. Keeping to the shadows, she walked with him to the yard where stolid bovies mingled with fleet equises. He whistled. A shaggy pony trotted to the fence.

Thamis opened the gate. “’Twas a present for my grandson, but you have a greater need.” He dropped a blanket over the sturdy beast’s back and hung a pair of panniers over its rump. “Supplies for your journey and goods suited to a journeyman peddler.”

“Thanks be to you and Penro. Your family will grow and fare well, but they must take care in the days to come.” She traced the globe and crescent. Then she tugged on the pony’s rope and led him for nearly a kil before mounting.


Wednesday, February 11, 2015

Wednesday's Writer's Tip - Tension and Suspense + Free book #MFRWauthor #BooksWeLove

Horu's Chosen (An Alternate Egypt Book 2) is free until February 14th

Still reading and gleaning things from From First Draft To Finished Novel by Karen Wiesner.

Tension and suspense are needed to keep the reader turning the pages. We've all read books when you say to yourself "Just one more page." The writer has caught you up in the tension and suspense of the story. You want to know what happens next. Without these elements, the reader will toss the books aside.

Is there a difference between the two elements. It's a matter of degree. Tension makes the characters worry and the reader anxious about what will come next. Some stories have a lot of tension and little suspense. The decisions the characters make aren't earth-shattering. They may not be the right decisions but their choice brings tension to the story.

Now we come to suspense. This brings major worry for the characters and to the reader. They really worry about what is going to happen. Will the character's decision bring them into danger?

Both tension and suspense need to be built from the first page until the conclusion and the story ends. They need to be brought to a conclusion that allows the reader and the characters to be satisfied.

Though both need to be present at all times there is also a need for a break for the reader and the characters. Give them time to breathe. Give them time to relax. Remove them from the growing tension or suspense to experience something that eases them and the reader. This is particularly true with suspense. If the characters are kept on edge every moment of their story. The reader will become breathless and perhaps decide they can's read another world.

I've read books where the suspense almost makes me ill and I usually put the books aside. I've also read, especially romances, where the tension drags on forever. I stop reading. There are other books i've tried to read that lack either element. I stop reading.

Tuesday, February 10, 2015

Tuesday's Inspiration - How Not To Gain Readers #MFRWauthor #BooksWeLove


Still reading an essay by John Hershey and came across a tidbit - actually three of the reasons writers write stories that aren't ways to gain reader. There are ways to gain niche readers but that's something different than sitting down and writing a book to antagonize readers.

Write in anger. So you feel really strong about a subject and you step onto the podium or stand on the park bench and let your anger buzz across the paper like a swarm of killer bees. Humorless anger will turn people off. Now there have been books written in anger but they contain a lot of humor and cause people to think and to react without having their emotions blazed away.

Write for catharsis - This can be done and can be a book people might read but not if there's weeping and whining across the pages of the book. All the emotional turmoil and confusion will produce the same turmoil and confusion in the reader. Writers want to be understood but he or she has to have command what they're writing and not wander around. Here discipline could make this kind of book readable.

Write for money. Sure we all want to make money with the writing but a writer can't sit down and say I'm writing this story for money. What they're trying to do is write to a formula and there's really no formula. Now this book could be badly written and may make money but that doesn't make it a good story.

So while you're looking for inspiration as you write write what you love and if you need to show anger, do it with a bit of humor. If you're confused make sure there's a discipline to the writing that keeps confusion from filling the pages with angst. As for money forget formulaic stories and write a good book. The money or the readers may come.

Monday, February 9, 2015

Meandering on Monday with Janet Lane Walters #MFRWauthor

 Meander 1 -Snow or not - They predicted a storm to begin last night after midnight and continue through the day. So far there is no snow. Not sure why. Actually I'm kind of glad it didn't come. This has been a snowy February and we haven't borne the brunt of the weather. Been thinking the weather predictions are sort of like the other predictions about awards, about life and about everything. Sometimes they come true and sometimes they dont.

Meander 2 - Getting ready for taxes is so much fun. This time the accountant will come to the house instead of us going to him. An interesting proposition. Really need to get these done before DH has surgery.

Meander 3 - The Goddesses of Solunda is going well. One more chapter to re-write and a lot to type in but I'm moving ahead as fast as I can. Once this is finished I'll need to move ahead with the next story and also to get those I'm regaining from a publisher into good shape so I can get them off to BWL. So much to do and so little time.